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EMAIL SEND TO MY BROTHER TO TAKE YPUR ADICE

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I'm writing about asking for your some advice. This summer, I don't have to go to school so I want to do a part-time job in my freetime. I searched a lot of jobs on the Internet, however I don't know which job is suitable for me. I wil tell you some information about my strengths. First, I am able to communicate with foreign customer, I can speak many languages such as Korean, Spanish and English. Next, I have a passion for work in Marketing. I can develop marketing strategies for a short time and boost sales. I feel I am a creative person, there are many ideas in my mind if I want to do something. Finally, I am hard-working people. I always meet the deadlines on time and do my best to achieve a goal that I set clearly. So, Can you reply me as soon as possible, please? Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Best wishes, Linh
I'm writing about asking for your
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some
advice. This summer, I don't
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have to
go to school
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so
I want to do a part-time job in my
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freetime
. I searched
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a lot of
jobs on the Internet,
however
I don't know which job is suitable for me. I
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wil
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tell
you
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some
information about my strengths.

First
, I am able to communicate with foreign customer, I can speak
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many
languages such as Korean, Spanish and English.

Next
, I have a passion for work in Marketing. I can develop marketing strategies for a short time and boost sales. I feel I am a creative person, there are
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many
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ideas
in my mind if I want to do something.

Finally
, I am
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hard
-working
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people
. I always
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meet
the deadlines on time and do my best to achieve a goal that I set
clearly
.

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So
, Can you reply me as
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soon
as possible,
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please
?

Looking forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Best wishes,

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Linh

IELTS essay EMAIL SEND TO MY BROTHER TO TAKE YPUR ADICE

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
160 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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