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College students face a large number of challenges during the first semester

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College students face a large number of challenges during the first semester that requires some necessary skills to overcome. The first problem that first-year students face is time management. In high schools, students have a fixed schedule for the whole school year and still stay with their families, so they do not worry too much about time management. But in college, they have to move out and arrange their own timetable for all subjects. As a result, students should schedule their logical time, not heavy like high school, divide more time to relax and student clubs. In addition, being too passionate about doing part-time jobs, chasing money are serious problems that freshmen are facing. When coming to a big city to study, there are a lot of temptations such as buying modern clothes, going out to eat with friends, so they have to work hard to have more money to meet their excess needs. Furthermore, during the first semester, students just learn basic subjects. For this reason, they tend to go to the university less and focus on doing part-time jobs in the first year. To settle the issue, freshmen must be aware that basic subjects are the foundation for major subjects, and they should concentrate on going to class regularly to get good grades, graduate on time, then do the expert job with a meritorious salary. In short,
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IELTS essay College students face a large number of challenges during the first semester

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  American English
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