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Elder people are important part of our life in many of cities the percentage of older people increasing nowadays

Elder people are important part of our life in many of cities the percentage of older people increasing nowadays 6l6O3
undouteldy in this contemporary Era senior citizens are vital part of our life in abundant of states the percentage of Grey haired peoples increasing day by day this essay will discuss about the pros and cons in upcoming paragraphs before embarking to its conclusion. To begin with plethoa of reasons are associated with this statement from which first and foremost is there are many masses retire in order to get attention at home to examplify according to a survey can be found that government expands retirement age after that confer best job for senior citizens however they set the age limit for doing work owing to this administration can reduce the ratio of their retire old people next point is that highly taxes is it the leading cause of effect on the family members because if authorities do not render pension to grey haired due to this all taxes burden on their family members. On the flip side although there are a number reasons but it's cons cannot be ignored first national money would we spend to Healthcare and transport facilities for increasing number of senior citizen to explain it a research by Oxford University state that old people should go to parks and so on are not only grey hair preferred to go outdoors but also good for their health because it that is crucial in order to stay fit as a fiddleTo conclude given of formation information it is evident that there are several action to cope up with this issue however the percentage of grey haired is will be more on the the behalf of retirement
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undouteldy
in this contemporary Era senior citizens are vital part of our life in abundant of states the percentage of
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Grey
haired peoples increasing day by day this essay will
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discuss about the
pros and cons in upcoming paragraphs
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of reasons
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with this statement from which
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and foremost is there are
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many
masses retire in order to
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get
attention at home to
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examplify
according to a survey can
be found
that
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government
expands retirement age after that confer best job for senior citizens
however
they set the age limit for doing work owing to this administration can
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reduce
the ratio of their retire
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old
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people
next
point is that
highly
taxes is it the leading cause of effect on the family members
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because
if authorities do not render pension to
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grey
haired due to this all taxes burden on their family members. On the flip side although there are a number reasons
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but
it's cons cannot be
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ignored
first
national money would we spend to Healthcare and transport facilities for increasing number of senior citizen to
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a research
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old
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people
should go to parks and
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only
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grey
hair preferred to go outdoors
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but
also
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good
for their health
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because
it
that is
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conclude
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given
of formation information it is evident that there are
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several action
to cope up with this issue
however
the percentage of
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grey
haired is will be more on
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retirement
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IELTS essay Elder people are important part of our life in many of cities the percentage of older people increasing nowadays

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
268 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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