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Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.5

Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. v. 5
Some believe that primary school to post secondary tuition should be exempted from any charges. I stand by this view and believe that adolescents may not perform well in class should they require to pay and also, believe that everyone must be given a chance. Working while studying would cause severe stress. In other words, pupils already have an enormous pressure from class-room environment itself. Making them pay for their tuition would not only, add more pressure, but also will make studying a burden which can have detrimental effects on a student's performance resulting in poor grades. For example, when I was studying overseas as an offshore student the amount of pressure and stress from the university and the workplace was extreme. Knowing that I had to earn my living and travel expenses while maintaining good grades was one of the most difficult tasks I have ever come acrossed. Therefore, having to focus only on studies would make a student shine in the class-room. Everyone must be given an equal opportunity. Critics who view that education should a chargeable service argue, that children may take free education for granted and not take responsibility, resulting in a poor return on investment from an economic perspective. While this is true to some extent in my opinion, the only method to measure if someone can take responsibility would be by giving them an opportunity. For instance, if a child born to an economically deprived family, that child will never be able to contribute to society if the tuition is chargeable. There have been many examples of individuals from around the world where they have risen up from poverty to become wealthy. Hence, regardless of the economic situation of a citizen everyone must be given a chance to shine. In conclusion, children may not perform well when they are required to pay for their studies due to added stress from having to earn while studying. In addition, kids who are born to poor families may never get a chance to contribute to the society should the education is paid.
Some
believe that primary school to post secondary tuition should
be exempted
from any charges. I stand by this view and believe that adolescents may not perform well in
class
should they require
to pay
and
also
, believe that everyone
must
be
given
a chance.

Working while
studying
would cause severe
stress
.
In other words
, pupils already have an enormous pressure from
class
-room environment itself. Making them pay for their tuition would not
only
,
add
more pressure,
but
also
will
make
studying
a burden which can have detrimental effects on a student's performance resulting in poor grades.
For example
, when I was
studying
overseas as an offshore student the amount of pressure and
stress
from the university and the workplace was extreme. Knowing that I had to earn my living and travel expenses while maintaining
good
grades was one of the most difficult tasks I have ever
come
acrossed
.
Therefore
, having to focus
only
on studies would
make
a student shine in the
class
-room.

Everyone
must
be
given
an equal opportunity. Critics who view that education should a chargeable service argue, that children may take free education for granted and not take responsibility, resulting in a poor return on investment from an economic perspective. While this is true to
some
extent in my opinion, the
only
method to measure if someone can take responsibility would be by giving them an opportunity.
For instance
, if a child born to an
economically
deprived family, that child will never be able to contribute to society if the tuition is chargeable. There have been
many
examples of individuals from around the world where they have risen up from poverty to become wealthy.
Hence
, regardless of the economic situation of a citizen everyone
must
be
given
a chance to shine.

In conclusion
, children may not perform well when they
are required
to pay for their studies due to
added
stress
from having to earn while
studying
.
In addition
, kids who
are born
to poor families may never
get
a chance to contribute to the society should the education
is paid
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Education, from preschool through university, should be paid for by the government and therefore free to students. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
345 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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Grammatical Range: 8.0
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