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edmontosaurs survived the winter by migrating south to more hospitable regions

edmontosaurs survived the winter by migrating south to more hospitable regions AgrRX
The article states that edmontosaurs survived the winter by migrating south to more hospitable regions and provide three reasons of support. Nevertheless, the speaker casts doubt on each of the author's reasons. First of all, the reading claims that edmontosaurs fed on plants which only grew in the temperate zones, so they must migrated to the south. The speaker refutes this point by saying that the place where edmontosaurs lived were shining by sun for 24 hours a day in the summer, so there were lots of plants and lots of nutritions leaving on the ground which edmontosaurs could feed on even during the winter. Secondly, the article posits that they lived in herds so they moved in herds helping them to migrate. The speaker, on the other hand, contends that there are a lot of reasons for animals to live in herds. He states that they wanted to have extra protection for predators and takes an example of the animals which live in herds but do not migrate. Last but not least, the passage shows that edmontosaurs had physically capable of migrating long distances and they had locomotive power to move. The professor opposes this point by explaining that some of them were not adults and they must moved slowly, so they made whole herds to slow down, which made the problem to migrate for long distances. To sum up, based on the evidence presented above, both writer and professor hold conflicting views about whether edmotosaurs migrated. It is clear that they will have trouble finding common ground on this issue.
The article states that
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edmontosaurs
survived the winter by migrating south to more hospitable regions and provide three reasons of support.
Nevertheless
, the speaker casts doubt on each of the author's reasons.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, the reading claims that
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edmontosaurs
fed on plants which
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only
grew in the temperate zones,
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so
they
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must
migrated to the south. The speaker refutes this point by saying that the place where
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edmontosaurs
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lived
were shining by sun for 24 hours a day in the summer,
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so
there were lots of plants and lots of
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nutritions
leaving on the ground which
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edmontosaurs
could feed on even during the winter.

Secondly
, the article posits that they
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lived
in
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herds
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so
they
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moved
in
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herds
helping them to migrate. The speaker,
on the other hand
, contends that there are
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a lot of
reasons for animals to
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live
in
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herds
. He states that they wanted to have extra protection for predators and takes an example of the animals which
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live
in
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herds
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but
do not migrate.

Last
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but
not least, the passage
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shows
that
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edmontosaurs
had
physically
capable of migrating long
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
distances and
they had locomotive power to
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move
. The professor opposes this point by explaining that
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some
of them were not
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adults and
they
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must
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moved
slowly
,
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so
they made whole
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herds
to slow down, which made the problem to migrate for long distances.

To sum up, based on the evidence presented above, both writer and professor hold conflicting views about whether
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edmotosaurs
migrated. It is
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clear
that they will have trouble finding common ground on this issue.
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IELTS essay edmontosaurs survived the winter by migrating south to more hospitable regions

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
262 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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