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Economic growth is the only way to end world poverty. However, some people says it leads to environment damage and should be stopped. To what extent do you agree? v.5

Economic growth is the only way to end world poverty. However, some people says it leads to environment damage and should be stopped. v. 5
The world has remarkably developed economically over recent years. Some people think economic development is the only solution to stop poverty in the world, whereas others believe that the advancement, today, is damaging our planet so stopping it is a necessity. This essay will discuss why economic growth is relatively necessary and why it should not be entirely stopped despite environmental destruction. On the one hand, economic growth has considerably contributed to improve the life quality of people living in underdeveloped and developing countries. Over recent years, the number of impoverished people decreased around the world, especially in Third World Countries. For example, the number of poor people who lack of food has halved in some African countries such as Nigeria, Namibia and Ghana. Moreover, today, less children are dying due to lack of water, food and medicine than before in these countries. Therefore, economic developments should not be ended as long as it contributes to alleviate impoverishment On the other hand, despite the considerable advantages of economic advancement, it plays a destructive role in the nature. Speaking clearly, the economic development has resulted in climate change which puts the future of the planet at risk. For instance, the idea of steady advancement is causing deforestation, air pollution, sea pollution, the loss of huge glaciers, the loss of wild. In other words, all these factors have caused climate crisis and global warming result from these factors. However, economic advancements can also create solutions to fight against the fact of global warming just as it has been a solution to poverty. To illustrate, developed countries can raise national budgets to find radical solutions, which can help to stop climate, crisis, and support financially and cooperate with environment protection organizations. Hence, humanity can benefit from economic growth to protect environment. In conclusion, I partly agree with the view that economic advancements have played a role in damaging the planet. However, the economic development can be a solution both to reduce poverty and to protect the environment.
The
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world
has
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economically
over recent years.
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people
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think
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economic
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development
is the
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only
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solution
to
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stop
poverty in the
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world
, whereas others believe that the
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advancement
,
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today
, is damaging our planet
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so
stopping it is a necessity. This essay will discuss why
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economic
growth is
relatively
necessary and why it should not be
entirely
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stopped
despite environmental destruction.

On the one hand,
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economic
growth has
considerably
contributed to
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improve
the life quality of
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people
living in underdeveloped and developing
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countries
. Over recent years, the number of impoverished
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people
decreased around the
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world
,
especially
in Third
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World
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Countries
.
For example
, the number of poor
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people
who lack of food has halved in
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some
African
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countries
such as Nigeria, Namibia and Ghana.
Moreover
,
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today
,
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less
children are dying due to lack of water, food and medicine than
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before
in these
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countries
.
Therefore
,
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economic
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developments
should not
be ended
as long as it contributes to alleviate impoverishment

On the other hand
, despite the considerable advantages of
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economic
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advancement
, it plays a destructive role in the nature. Speaking
clearly
, the
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economic
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development
has resulted in climate
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change
which puts the future of the planet at
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risk
.
For instance
, the
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idea
of steady
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advancement
is causing deforestation, air pollution, sea pollution, the loss of huge glaciers, the loss of wild.
In other words
, all these factors have caused climate crisis and global warming result from these factors.

However
,
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economic
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advancements
can
also
create
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solutions
to fight against the fact of global warming
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just
as it has been a
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solution
to poverty. To illustrate, developed
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countries
can raise national budgets to find radical
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solutions
, which can
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help
to
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stop
climate, crisis, and support
financially
and cooperate with environment protection organizations.
Hence
, humanity can benefit from
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economic
growth to protect environment.

In conclusion
, I partly
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agree
with the view that
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economic
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advancements
have played a role in damaging the planet.
However
, the
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economic
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development
can be a
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solution
both to
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reduce
poverty and to protect the environment.
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IELTS essay Economic growth is the only way to end world poverty. However, some people says it leads to environment damage and should be stopped. v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
334 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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