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economic growth is main factor in any country's growth while some beleive that other types of progress are also important. discuss both and give opinion.

economic growth is main factor in any country's growth while some beleive that other types of progress are also important. PgWRj
Financial strength is the most important thing for a country and the government should focus on this the most, yet the other factors are also important for country’s growth. This essay will argue about the both views, however in my opinion economic growth should be the priority of any country. Increase in the economy is the key factor for any country and it is the main thing to show the progress of any country. While we are measuring the progress of any country, it is measured on the basis of economic rise and fall. For example, All the international grading system, the loans and the place in UN is based on this grading. Moreover it also helps in maintaining the currency value and preventing it to be devalued. On the other hand, there are lots of other factors and sectors, which plays an important role in the race of rising and improvement. Some believe that they are also very essential, because the any country’s heads are not going to achieve the target number without the progress of these factors. For example, if we compare a country to a house, you cannot have a happy family if you only have lots of money but you don’t work on personal relations and the improvement in the lifestyles of the family. To conclude, I would suggest that both economic and other sectors have a vital role in the progress of any country. The other type of progress are like pebbles which can fill in the gaps and can give small kick backs to country’s progress.
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growth. This essay will argue about the both views,
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in my opinion economic growth should be the priority of any country.

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for any
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country
and it is the main thing to
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show
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progress
of any
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country
. While we are measuring the
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progress
of any
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country
, it
is measured
on the basis of economic rise and fall.
For example
, All the international grading system, the loans and the place in UN
is based
on this grading.
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it
also
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helps
in maintaining the currency value and preventing it to
be devalued
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hand, there are lots of
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other
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factors
and sectors, which plays an
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important
role in the race of rising and improvement.
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heads are not going to achieve the target number without the
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progress
of these
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factors
.
For example
, if we compare a
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country
to a
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house
, you cannot have a happy family if you
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only
have lots of money
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you don’t work on personal relations and the improvement in the lifestyles of the family.

To conclude
, I would suggest that both economic and
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other
sectors have a vital role in the
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progress
of any
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country
. The
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other
type of
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are like pebbles which can fill in the gaps and can give
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kick backs to
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country’s
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progress
.
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IELTS essay economic growth is main factor in any country's growth while some beleive that other types of progress are also important.

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