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Due to traffic congestion, humans should make an effort to use more public transport in urban areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Due to traffic congestion, humans should make an effort to use more public transport in urban areas. JLLNe
In an effort to reduce traffic jams, people should avail more of the mass transportation systems provided for city commuters. I strongly agree that traffic will run more smoothly if public transport was more popular. This essay will firstly discuss how greater use of buses can clear the roadways; secondly explain how the extra revenue earned could be used, followed by a reasoned conclusion. Firstly, if all the public were to use buses, that would free up the roads as there would be less cars. Furthermore, buses could pull in and out of bus stops without any delays, as they would not need to wait for a clearing to get back into the traffic. For example, in Ireland this is an issue, where even though there are laws that state a bus has right of way when indicating back onto the road, it is rare to see anyone yielding to them. Moreover, if more people decided to use public transport then city councils would have extra revenue to put back into the system. Eventually, cities could invest in rapid transit systems, such as the metro in Paris, which operate on their own tracks and so offer even more alleviation from gridlocked streets. For instance, a commuter in Toronto can travel from one’s apartment building to work without ever setting foot on the streets above. However, outside of major cities it is difficult to fund these kinds of projects. In conclusion, if more people were to opt out of private transportation, there would be a decrease in the amount of traffic congestion due to clearer roads and funding for superior forms of public transport. Therefore, everyone could spend less time stuck in traffic and more time where they want to be.
In an effort to
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reduce
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traffic
jams,
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people
should avail more of the mass transportation systems provided for city commuters. I
strongly
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agree
that
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traffic
will run more
smoothly
if
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public
transport was more popular. This essay will
firstly
discuss how greater
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use
of buses can
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clear
the roadways;
secondly
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explain
how the extra revenue earned could be
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used
, followed by a reasoned conclusion.
Firstly
, if all the
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public
were to
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use
buses, that would free up the roads as there would be
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less
cars.
Furthermore
, buses could pull in and out of bus
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stops
without any delays, as they would not need to wait for a clearing to
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get
back into the
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traffic
.
For example
, in Ireland this is an issue, where
even though
there are laws that state a bus has right of way when indicating back onto the road, it is rare to
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see
anyone yielding to them.

Moreover
, if more
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people
decided to
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use
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public
transport then city councils would have extra revenue to put back into the system.
Eventually
,
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cities
could invest in rapid transit systems, such as the metro in Paris, which operate on their
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own
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tracks
and
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so
offer even more alleviation from gridlocked streets.
For instance
, a commuter in Toronto can travel from one’s apartment building to work without ever setting foot on the streets above.
However
, outside of major
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cities
it is difficult to fund these kinds of projects.

In conclusion
, if more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
were to opt out of private transportation, there would be a decrease in the amount of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traffic
congestion due to clearer roads and funding for superior forms of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
transport.
Therefore
, everyone could spend less time stuck in
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traffic
and more
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time where
they want to be.
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IELTS essay Due to traffic congestion, humans should make an effort to use more public transport in urban areas.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
290 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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