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Due to an increasing population which leads to significant demands in daily transportation

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Due to an increasing population which leads to significant demands in daily transportation. Unless this issue is resolved properly, there could be environmental consequences detrimental to global civilizations. It is advisable that governments spend their public budget on setting up or improving railway conditions rather than roads. In my viewpoint, I am an advocate of this solution First of all, utilizing railways could significantly reduce a great amount of time. This is obviously because the number of private cars or motorbikes has sharply risen recently, therefore during the rush hours, they unintentionally turn into obstacles on the road and slow down the other means of transport behind. For example, in Vietnam, when it is time to leave for the workplace in the mornings, we can easily observe severe traffic congestions especially in crowded residential areas such as District 7. Citizens hardly move forward due to intense traffic jams which would be wasting much of their precious time. But public transport, particularly, railways should be a worth-investing resolution to tackle this worsening problem. Secondly, railways can be considered as an element contributing to lower gas emissions. The more private cars and motorbikes being used, the more emissions are released to the atmosphere prompting negative greenhouse effects involving X-rays, for instance, to pierce the horizon and cause harm to humans as a whole or sudden climate change. Ultimately, the human race would be on the brink of failing to cope with plenty of resulting alterations. It has been reported by US researchers that ice of two poles is faster melting than previously predicted chiefly because of a warming climate and constantly changing weather patterns are the primary culprits and both of them relate to gas emissions. Admittedly, boarding is not an entirely efficient measure to totally eliminate gas emissions but this is the only proposition to impede bad agencies occurring, thus the officials are expected to immediately use the public purse and invest in railways

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properly
, there could be environmental consequences detrimental to global civilizations. It is advisable that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritiespublic authorities
governments
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railway
 conditions rather
 than roads. In my viewpoint, I am an advocate of this solution

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First of all
, utilizing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtracklinerail line
railways
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This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviate
reduce
 a great amount of time. This is obviously
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because
 the number of private cars or motorbikes has sharply
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, in Vietnam, when it is time to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :depart
leave
 for the workplace in the mornings, we can easily
 observe severe traffic congestions especially
 in crowded residential areas such as District 7. Citizens hardly This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocate
move
 forward due to intense traffic jams which would be wasting much of their precious time. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
But
 public transport, particularly
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtracklinerail line
railways
 should be a worth-investing resolution to tackle this worsening problem.

Secondly
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtracklinerail line
railways
 can be considered
 as an element contributing to lower gas emissions. The more private cars and motorbikes being This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
, the more emissions are released
 to the atmosphere prompting This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
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change
. Ultimately
, the human race would be on the brink of failing to cope with This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
plenty
 of resulting alterations. It has been reported
 by US researchers that ice of two poles is faster melting than previously predicted chiefly
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because
 of a warming climate and constantly
 changing weather patterns are the primary culprits and both of them relate to gas emissions.

Admittedly
, boarding is not an entirely
 efficient measure to totally
 eliminate gas emissions This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
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only
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bad
 agencies occurring, thus
 the officials are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :anticipated
expected
 to immediately This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 the public purse and invest in You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtracklinerail line
railways