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Drug addiction is a problem that has been increasing immensely among our society today. Discuss the cause of drug addiction and suggest solutions.

Drug addiction is a problem that has been increasing immensely among our society today. Discuss the cause of drug addiction and suggest solutions. 6djA0
Drug addiction is the global concern and the whole world is entangled into it. Youngsters are the ones who can get easily engage with such addiction and harm their health unknowingly. The causes of such addiction are extremely detrimental and such type of effects and their solutions are further presented in this essay. If we compare the usage of drugs from the past then, a sea change is been observed in their usage and myriad cases of drug addiction have escalated. The most prominent reasons for such type of drug addiction has become a world-wide concern to look after. The major victims of such addiction are relationship issues, no employment, lack of money, poverty, stress and the list still elongates further. Youngsters are more prone to become a drug addict due to the manipulation of criminals and they follow their instructions blindly. This results into more vulnerable situations and also have detrimental effects on their career too. There are ample of steps that we can undertake in order to eradicate this problem. Firstly, parents should spent time with their young children and become friendly with them so that children can tell their problem without hesitation. In addition to this educational programs should be formed in order to convey the seriousness of such issue. Last but not the least, government should punish such drug peddlers and undertake serious steps in action in order to reduce such issue. To recapitulate, Individual citizens have to exempt themselves to the usage of drugs and prevent others from doing so. This will lead to a better development of the society as well as its residents.
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Drug
addiction is the global concern and the whole world
is entangled
into it. Youngsters are the ones who can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
easily
engage with such addiction and harm their health
unknowingly
. The causes of such addiction are
extremely
detrimental and such type of effects and their solutions are
further
presented in this essay.

If we compare the usage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drugs
from the past then, a sea
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
is been
observed in their usage and myriad cases of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drug
addiction have escalated. The most prominent reasons for such type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drug
addiction has become a world-wide concern to look after. The major victims of such addiction are relationship issues, no employment, lack of money, poverty,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
and the list
still
elongates
further
. Youngsters are more prone to become a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
drug
addict due to the manipulation of
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criminals and
they follow their instructions
blindly
. This results into more vulnerable situations and
also
have detrimental effects on their career too.

There are ample of steps that we can undertake in order to eradicate this problem.
Firstly
, parents should
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spent
time with their young children and become friendly with them
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that children can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
their problem without hesitation.
In addition
to this educational programs should
be formed
in order to convey the seriousness of such issue. Last
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but
not the least,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should punish such
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drug
peddlers and undertake serious steps in action in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
such issue.

To recapitulate, Individual citizens
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have to
exempt themselves to the usage of
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drugs
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
others from doing
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so
. This will lead to a better development of the society
as well
as its residents.
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IELTS essay Drug addiction is a problem that has been increasing immensely among our society today. Discuss the cause of drug addiction and suggest solutions.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.0
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