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Does the educational success of a person depend on the teacher or it the attitude of the student? v.1

Does the educational success of a person depend on the teacher or it the attitude of the student? v. 1
Achieving academic success is considered as an outset towards the secure career or employment opportunities, which are really hard to get these days. Thereafter, It has become a moot topic that whether success at school is the whole and sole responsibility of teachers or the frame of mind of the learners is liable. I completely agree with the former notion and will explicate the supporting ideas in the following paragraphs. Commencing with the first and the foremost reason justifying that why an educator plays an imperative role in enhancing the performance of students is, a teacher with incredible skills has the power to plant seeds of curiosity. Because an effective teacher can easily make the pupils understand the fundamental concepts behind things, which in turn will generate interest in learning new things. Hence, with the help of teachers, manatees can grasp knowledge with no trouble and can attain higher scores. Another important reason is that the students spend most of the time in school and mentors present around have great impact on them. A person learns a lot of things about life at school, reason being, teachers not only teach them the syllabus, but also instil in them the traits required to tackle the difficulties of the demanding occupations of the future. These qualities, as a result boosts the self-confidence of students and results in better learning experience. To conclude, by using efficacious skills teachers must provide the best education to the students by delivering what is required in exams and by laying the foundation to step ahead in life and higher education.
Achieving academic success
is considered
as an outset towards the secure career or employment opportunities, which are
really
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hard
to
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get
these days. Thereafter, It has become a moot topic that whether success at school is the whole and sole responsibility of
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teachers
or the frame of mind of the learners is liable. I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the former notion and will explicate the supporting
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ideas
in the following paragraphs.

Commencing with the
first
and the foremost reason justifying that why an educator plays an imperative role in enhancing the performance of
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students
is, a
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teacher
with incredible
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skills
has the power to plant seeds of curiosity.
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Because
an effective
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teacher
can
easily
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make
the pupils understand the fundamental concepts behind things, which in turn will generate interest in learning new things.
Hence
, with the
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help
of
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teachers
, manatees can grasp knowledge with no trouble and can attain higher scores.

Another
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important
reason is that the
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students
spend most of the time in school and mentors present around have great impact on them. A person learns
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a lot of
things about life at school, reason being,
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teachers
not
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only
teach them the syllabus,
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but
also
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instil
in them the traits required to tackle the difficulties of the demanding occupations of the future. These qualities,
as a result
boosts the self-confidence of
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students
and results in better learning experience.

To conclude
, by using efficacious
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skills
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teachers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
provide the best education to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
by delivering what
is required
in exams and by laying the foundation to step ahead in life and higher education.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Does the educational success of a person depend on the teacher or it the attitude of the student? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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