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Does the benefits of advertisement outweigh its drawback? Discuss both views and give your opinion

Does the benefits of advertisement outweigh its drawback? Discuss both views and give your opinion 25JqA
Advertisements have a huge impact on the subconscious mind of humans. Some people feel that the benefits of advertisement outweigh its drawbacks. Others refute it. In my opinion, advertisement has both, benefits and drawbacks. It is truly said that what we see through our eyes, feeds our soul. Advertisement has opened those doors for the normal public which we could have never imagined. People can choose from a wide range of options which are shown via advertisement. From the food we eat to the clothes we wear to the material required to build a house, everything is being advertised today. Renowned entrepreneurs throw a large amount of money just to attract the audience to their products. Some advertisements can deliver messages related to our social and political problems. It helps in making people aware of their surroundings. Especially, in an ongoing unprecedented time like COVID-19, advertisements have proven to be a blessing in disguise as these have helped in spreading public awareness about this deadly disease. In recent times, it has also helped in flourishing and spreading small-scale local businesses. But, on the other side, advertisement has drawbacks too. Children these days are easily influenced by watching their favorite celebrities endorsing an unhealthy lifestyle. As a result of which, the children tend to follow them. For example, if their favorite celebrity advertises about drinking high-calorie drinks, the children will follow him blindly without knowing the repercussions. For the products associated with healthcare and beauty, it has become easy to fool the viewers by showing only the brighter side of products, and by not showing the damage they could cause to our health. However, every problem comes with the seeds of a solution within it. Advertisements should be controlled and regulated by the governments so that they cannot be misused by the ones who sponsor them. Additionally, strict rules and regulations should be followed to mention the harmful and side effects of all the health care and food-related products on their product leaflets. The advertisements which contain sensitive content should be censored and should be prohibited for children, this could happen if there would be a “trigger warning” before running such kind of advertisements on television. To conclude, it can be said that advertisements have proven to be a blessing in the age of globalization. Its drawbacks could also be taken care of if the content of the advertisement is filtered and cautiously dealt with.
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Advertisements
have a huge impact on the subconscious mind of humans.
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Some
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people
feel that the benefits of
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advertisement
outweigh its drawbacks. Others refute it. In my opinion,
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advertisement
has both, benefits and drawbacks.

It is
truly
said that what we
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see
through our eyes, feeds our soul.
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Advertisement
has opened those doors for the normal public which we could have never imagined.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
People
can choose from a wide range of options which
are shown
via
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advertisement
. From the food we eat to the clothes we wear to the material required to build a
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house
, everything is
being advertised
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today
. Renowned entrepreneurs throw a large amount of money
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just
to attract the audience to their
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products
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
can deliver messages related to our social and political problems. It
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
in making
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
aware of their surroundings.
Especially
, in an ongoing unprecedented time like COVID-19,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
have proven to be a blessing in disguise as these have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
in spreading public awareness about this deadly disease. In recent times, it has
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
in flourishing and spreading
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small
-scale local businesses.

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But
, on the other side,
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advertisement
has drawbacks too.
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Children
these days are
easily
influenced by watching their favorite celebrities endorsing an unhealthy lifestyle.
As a result
of which, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
tend to follow them.
For example
, if their favorite celebrity advertises about drinking high-calorie drinks, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
will follow him
blindly
without knowing the repercussions. For the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
associated with healthcare and beauty, it has become easy to fool the viewers by showing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the brighter side of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
, and by not showing the damage they could cause to our health.

However
, every problem
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comes
with the seeds of a solution within it.
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Advertisements
should
be controlled
and regulated by the
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governments
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so
that they cannot
be misused
by the ones who sponsor them.
Additionally
, strict
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
and regulations should
be followed
to mention the harmful and side effects of all the health care and food-related
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
on their
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product
leaflets. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
which contain sensitive content should
be censored
and should
be prohibited
for
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children
, this could happen if there would be a “trigger warning”
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
running such kind of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
on television.

To conclude
, it can
be said
that
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advertisements
have proven to be a blessing in the age of globalization. Its drawbacks could
also
be taken
care of if the content of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
is filtered
and
cautiously
dealt with.
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IELTS essay Does the benefits of advertisement outweigh its drawback? Discuss both views and give your opinion

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