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many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities

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Working is important for everyone's livelihood. people needs to work to staple their family. However I personally work life balance is more important to anything. I will be sharing my thought with advantages or disadvantages of long working hours in below passages. On the one hand, people has to work to earn money to livelihood. "No money no honey", I mean to fulfill your needs everyone required money. Not only your essential requirement but also other liability. For instance, your loans, electricity bills, travel expense, mobile recharge so on required to pay. Beside that to staple your family, school fees for your children, money for any medical emergency all can be arrange if you work. In this competitive career world, it is necessary to be show your presence and important. Working hard and long Hours keeps individual highlighted in the working place, which helps to them in their yearly performance review and can be rewarded with professional and financial growth. On other hand, to work hard to run long time in competition, you have to fit physically and mentally. Working long hours will make your tired and may cause of many health issues. Which can become barrier in your career growth. It will not only effect your health but also can create mess in your married life sometimes, It is very important to balance between office and personal life. Everyone should bare time for social activity which can make person fit and active. and I believe it's responsibility of an individual as well as of management's or employer's. To recapitulate, I strongly believe in work life balance. an individual who manage his work and life equally and gives parallel importance to both get reach to highest level of satisfaction.
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is
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important
for everyone's livelihood.
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people
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needs
to
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work
to staple their family.
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However
I
personally
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work
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life
balance is more
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important
to anything. I will be sharing my
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thought
with advantages or disadvantages of
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long
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working
hours in below passages. On the one hand,
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people
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has
to
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work
to earn
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money
to livelihood.
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
No
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money
no honey
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"
, I mean to fulfill your needs everyone required
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money
. Not
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only
your essential requirement
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but
also
other liability.
For instance
, your loans, electricity bills, travel expense, mobile recharge
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so
on required to pay. Beside that to staple your family, school fees for your children,
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money
for any medical emergency all can be
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arrange
if you
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work
. In this competitive career world, it is necessary to be
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show
your presence and
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important
.
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Working
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hard
and
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long
Hours
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keeps
individual highlighted in the
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working
place, which
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helps
to them in their yearly performance review and can
be rewarded
with professional and financial growth. On other hand, to
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work
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hard
to run
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long
time in competition, you
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have to
fit
physically
and mentally.
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Working
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long
hours will
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make
your tired and may cause of
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many
health issues.
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Which
can become barrier in your career growth. It will not
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only
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effect
your health
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but
also
can create mess in your married
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life
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sometimes
, It is
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very
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important
to balance between office and personal
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life
. Everyone should
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bare
time for social activity which can
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make
person fit and active.
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and
I believe it's responsibility of an individual
as well
as of management's or employer's. To recapitulate, I
strongly
believe in
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work
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life
balance.
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an
individual who manage his
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work
and
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life
equally
and gives parallel importance to both
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get
reach to
A determiner is probably missing here: "the highest".
highest
level of satisfaction.
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IELTS essay many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
289 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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