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Does school still belong to us?

Does school still belong to us? R0AxM
Whether single-sex schools render more benefits than mixed school settings has sparked a heated debate. Some people affirm that students in male or female-only schools have better chances for academic achievements, whereas many others argue that co-ed schools offer students better social skills for their future. Personally, I am in favour of the latter view. Admittedly, single-sex schools have fewer distractions. The reason for this is if a school has only boys or girls, students would not be distracted by members of the opposite sex at school; hence, they can focus on their learning. Even so, these students still have access to the other gender after school, which means in reality, they must meet the other gender anyway. Consequently, the benefits of single-sex schools are quite limited. On the contrary, convincing arguments can be made that mixed schools provide a more comprehensive learning environment for children. To start with, students studying at mixed schools have more chances to communicate with members of the opposite sex. In other words, children learn how to talk to the other gender at an early age; therefore, their social skills would certainly be fostered. Moreover, mixed schools give students opportunities to deal with conflicts with the other gender, which strengthens students’ problem-solving skills. For instance, when a boy has a conflict with a girl at school, both of them must learn how to cope. This lesson must be learned sooner or later; as a result, students benefit more if they can learn it sooner. Finally, mixed schools provide students with a real-life scenario where both genders co-exist. Specifically, students can learn in an organic environment in which boys and girls must know how to interact with each other. In conclusion, I would concede that single-sex schools have some advantages. Despite that, combined schools certainly support students in a much better way. Overall, I am convinced that students should go to mixed schools for better professional, social and adult life.
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settings has sparked a heated debate.
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affirm that
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social
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for their future.
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Admittedly
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have fewer distractions.
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if a
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has
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boys or girls,
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would not
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, which means in reality, they
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the
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gender anyway.
Consequently
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are quite limited.

On the contrary
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be made
that
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mixed
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provide a more comprehensive learning environment for children. To
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studying at
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have more chances to communicate with members of the opposite sex. In
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words, children
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how to talk to the
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gender at an early age;
therefore
, their social
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would
certainly
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.
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give
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opportunities to deal with conflicts with the
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gender, which strengthens
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problem-solving
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benefit more if they can
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provide
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with a real-life scenario where both genders co-exist.
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can
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in an organic environment in which boys and girls
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know how to interact with each other.

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in a much
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IELTS essay Does school still belong to us?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
324 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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