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Do you want to spend your extra earnings on your comfort materials or you will take your parents to a vacation or concert. . . Give points and examples. v.1

Do you want to spend your extra earnings on your comfort materials or you will take your parents to a vacation or concert. . . Give points and examples. v. 1
Due to rapid development in economy and fast access to cheaper loans, more and more people are purchasing cars. While this may provide convenience and greater access to individuals, but it also puts strain on the environment due to the pollution caused by the cars. This essay will discuss the benefits of owning a car as a mode of transportation and detrimental effects cars have on the environment. On the one hand, the main advantage of using a car as a mode of transportation is that it provides greater levels of comfort and independence. In the absence of a proper public transport infrastructure, people are inclined towards owning a car as irrespective of weather conditions, car can help people travel from one destination to another and save time as well. In case of emergencies like taking a family member to the hospital, having a car can be a boon. Additionally, owning a car also brings in a sense of pride as it is seen as a status symbol. On the other hand, cars cause the greatest amount of pollution and congestion on roads. Global warming is increasing at a rapid pace and is now a real danger for human beings. As per the recent analysis, pollutants like CO2 emitted by cars are the major contributors in increasing smog and damaging the environment. Major cities in the world like New Delhi, Seoul, Shanghai are at alarming levels of pollution, most people cannot go out without wearing a mask. Diseases caused by poor quality of air are increasing at a fast pace. If the situation persists for long, soon the Earth will no longer be a habitable place. In conclusion, increase in pollution leading to climate change and worsening living conditions is far more dangerous regardless of any advantages possessing a car.
Due to rapid development in economy and
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fast
access to cheaper loans, more and more
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people
are purchasing
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cars
. While this may provide convenience and greater access to individuals,
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but
it
also
puts strain on the environment due to the
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pollution
caused by the
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cars
. This essay will discuss the benefits of owning a
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car
as a mode of transportation and detrimental effects
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
have on the environment.

On the one hand, the main advantage of using a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
as a mode of transportation is that it provides greater levels of comfort and independence. In the absence of a proper public transport infrastructure,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are inclined
towards owning a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
as irrespective of weather conditions,
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car
can
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help
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people
travel from one destination to another and save time
as well
. In case of emergencies like taking a family member to the hospital, having a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
can be a boon.
Additionally
, owning a
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car
also
brings in a sense of pride as it is
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seen
as a status symbol.

On the other hand
,
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cars
cause the greatest amount of
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pollution
and congestion on roads. Global warming is increasing at a rapid pace and is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
a real
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danger
for human beings. As per the recent analysis, pollutants like CO2 emitted by
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
are the major contributors in increasing smog and damaging the environment. Major cities in the world like New Delhi, Seoul, Shanghai
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are
at alarming levels of
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pollution
, most
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people
cannot go out without wearing a mask. Diseases caused by poor quality of air are increasing at a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
pace. If the situation persists for long,
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soon
the Earth will no longer be a habitable place.

In conclusion
, increase in
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pollution
leading to climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
and worsening living conditions is far more
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dangerous
regardless of any advantages possessing a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Do you want to spend your extra earnings on your comfort materials or you will take your parents to a vacation or concert. . . Give points and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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