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Do you think the advantages to living in a megacity outweigh the disadvantages?

Do you think the advantages to living in a megacity outweigh the disadvantages? pLmW3
Many people argue that we live in large cities better than smaller cities. I strongly agree with this. The essay will first discuss why people who live in megacities have better life function before saying large cities influence healths. One of the main benefits of dwelling in large cities is convenient for life. This is because If people went to shopping malls, banks, airports or hospitals, it is very close everywhere from houses. For example, there are perfect life functions in Tokyo. Many Japanese people in order to decide to live here. As a result, people would not spend much time to these places. In addition, there are a lot of jobs in megacities. For instance, employers which are in London release several hundred thousands openings every year. Consequently, many people choose to live large cities for work. However, there are some disadvantages. One obvious drawback is health hazards. This is because people can heard traffic noise and inhale emission in megacities. For example, lots of people who live in Beijing have much pressure and got lung cancer easily. Furthermore, megacities are too crowded so people can not relax and rest. In conclusion, I agree with the advantages of dwelling in large cities outweigh disadvantages because it is convenient for people go these places and save time.
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have better life function
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is convenient for life. This is
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, there are perfect life functions in Tokyo.
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Japanese
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would not spend much time to these places.
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disadvantages. One obvious drawback is health hazards. This is
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can heard traffic noise and inhale emission in
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in Beijing have much pressure and
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can not relax and rest.

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outweigh disadvantages
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go these places and save time.
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IELTS essay Do you think the advantages to living in a megacity outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
217 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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