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Do you think that there are too many militaries on our kitchens?

Do you think that there are too many militaries on our kitchens? 7p3pX
I was an Italian soldier in Poland. I didn't know why I was there, but I was there with a Polish soldier (supposedly a friend of mine, because we were talking all the way to there). At a certain point, we saw his military base and we were wondering if someone from a foreign country could enter the base without being Polish. So that I entered and that was all. Once there, we entered a building, which will be the hotel about which I will be writing later. There were lockers and everyone was undressing. It was a long corridor with locker rooms on both sides and along the whole corridor. I did the same but I was the last one at the locker room. Once I was normally dressed, my friend was gone and I went to the next floor. As last time, it was a corridor, but instead a bunch of locker rooms, there were kitchens. I went to my kitchen and saw something outside. (I was not on an upper floor, even though I've gone up). I went outside through the next kitchen's door and noticed that my window is dirty. I didn't want to enter the building again, and I had seen a little man inside one of the kitchens and asked him for the "Fairy". It's funny, because even in real life, I don't know what is the name of this thing. He didn't understand me and I was yelling at him "I speak neither English nor Polish, what don't you understand about the name Fairy? ". I was angry and when he understood me, I wanted him to give me the "fairy" bottle through the window, which he couldn't achieve either. Finally, I decided to enter the kitchen thinking "what an idiot this man". I was waiting in his kitchen, but he didn't come because I was in the wrong kitchen. And then I thought, "I am the idiot here, I'm in the wrong kitchen".
I was an Italian soldier in Poland. I didn't know why I was there,
but
I was there with a Polish soldier (
supposedly
a friend of mine,
because
we were talking all the way to there). At a certain point, we
saw
his military
base and
we were wondering if someone from a foreign country could enter the base without being Polish.
So
that I entered and that was all.

Once there, we entered a building, which will be the hotel about which I will be writing later. There were
lockers
and everyone was undressing. It was a long corridor with
locker
rooms on both sides and along the whole corridor. I did the same
but
I was the last one at the
locker
room.

Once I was
normally
dressed, my friend
was gone
and I went to the
next
floor. As last time, it was a corridor,
but
instead
a bunch of
locker
rooms, there were
kitchens
. I went to my
kitchen
and
saw
something outside. (I was not on an upper floor,
even though
I've gone up). I went outside through the
next
kitchen's door and noticed that my window is dirty.

I didn't want to enter the building again, and I had
seen
a
little
man
inside one of the
kitchens
and asked him for the
"
Fairy
"
. It's
funny
,
because
even in real life, I don't know what is the name of this thing. He didn't understand
me and
I was yelling at him
"
I speak neither English nor Polish, what don't you understand about the name Fairy?
"
. I was angry and when he understood me, I wanted him to give me the
"
fairy
"
bottle through the window, which he couldn't achieve either.

Finally
, I decided to enter the
kitchen
thinking
"
what an idiot this
man
"
. I was waiting in his
kitchen
,
but
he didn't
come
because
I was in the
wrong
kitchen
. And then I
thought
,
"
I am the idiot here, I'm in the
wrong
kitchen
"
.
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IELTS essay Do you think that there are too many militaries on our kitchens?

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