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Do you think that teenagers should be left to develop naturally or should be directed towards what their parents think is good for them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of these methods

Do you think that teenagers should be left to develop naturally or should be directed towards what their parents think is good for them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of these methods L35jK
In modern times, anxiety for adolescent’s behaviour, views to the life and future is becoming increasingly significant from parents’ side. For many peoole, it is optimum way that young teens can be able to develop naturally by own. However, there are also parents who worry about their children’s aftertime and can not let them to be abandon to implement desires that they want. In this essay, I will discuss the pros and cons alike of these ways in development teenagers as a individual person. To begin with, the version of developing naturally presents to everyone a confidence and make adolescent think diversely, such as amount of teens want to be originative and try their knack in various fields. As an illustration, some youngs are interested in arts by improving ability in dealing with Fine Arts, they gradually realised what facilities they have. Moreover, they have the chance to meet and make a common sence with people of various sphere. The sample is the same for all branches that teens choose. Secondy, developing naturally teaches to be determined in any time. What I mean by this is that teenagers learn how to cope with problems by taking responsibility on them. Some of them may develop by working, or studying and learning distinctive skills. On the another hand, developing by own naturally is not always easy. There are sufficient issues that resist to improving skills or developing as a person. Adolescent cannot develop from all of sides, different emotions that teens may struggle with, surroundings which they communicate impact to behaviour, views to lifestyle, even they may commit crimes. Subsequently, teenagers may become stubborn, like as they do not need other’s opinions and advices which directed them in tough cases. In that cases, it is one of the best things is to be directed by parents for teens. If you ask why, parents know their children well enough. If we look at benefits of being directed towards parents expectations, parents give a hand their children to choose the best direction and always support them. This is the most important thing for teenagers that they need. It also shows that they feel like as they are given a special attention by parents. There are plenty of famous teenagers in sports, arts, films, science and they became famous by theri parents support and direction which was good for them. In the another case, it can be stressful for adolescent to live on parents expectations and it leads to feelings of timid, also they have to live under pressure. To sum up, parents decide how the teenager develops and the most significant thing is teenagers develop diversely and choose right life road. However, it is important to know that it is convenient for teenagers whether parents take into account the wishes of their children and choose the way of upbringing and development that suits teens’ nature and character.
In modern times, anxiety for
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adolescent’s
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behaviour
, views to the life and future is becoming
increasingly
significant from
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parents’
side. For
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many
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peoole
, it is
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optimum
way that young
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teens
can be able to
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develop
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naturally
by
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own
.
However
, there are
also
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parents
who worry about their
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children’s
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aftertime
and can not
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let
them to be abandon to implement desires that they want. In this essay, I will discuss the pros and cons alike of these ways in development
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teenagers
as
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a
individual person.

To
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begin
with, the version of
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developing
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naturally
presents to everyone a confidence and
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make
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adolescent
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think
diversely
, such as amount of
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teens
want to be
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originative
and try their knack in various fields. As an illustration,
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some
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are interested
in arts by improving ability in dealing with Fine Arts, they
gradually
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realised
what facilities they have.
Moreover
, they have the chance to
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meet
and
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make
a common
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sence
with
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people
of various sphere. The sample is the same for all branches that
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teens
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choose
.
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Secondy
,
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developing
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naturally
teaches to
be determined
in any time. What I mean by this is that
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teenagers
learn how to cope with problems by taking responsibility on them.
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Some
of them may
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develop
by working, or studying and learning distinctive
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skills
.

On the another hand,
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developing
by
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own
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naturally
is not always easy. There are sufficient issues that resist to improving
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skills
or
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developing
as a person.
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Adolescent
cannot
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develop
from
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all of sides
,
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different
emotions that
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teens
may struggle with, surroundings which they communicate impact to
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behaviour
, views to lifestyle, even they may commit crimes.
Subsequently
,
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teenagers
may become stubborn, like as they do not need other’s opinions and advices which directed them in tough cases. In that cases, it is one of the best things is to
be directed
by
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parents
for
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teens
. If you ask why,
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parents
know their
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children
well
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enough
.

If we look at benefits of
being directed
towards
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parents
expectations,
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parents
give a hand their
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children
to
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choose
the best direction and always support them. This is the most
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important
thing for
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teenagers
that they need. It
also
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shows
that they feel like as they are
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given
a special attention by
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parents
. There are
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plenty
of
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famous
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teenagers
in sports, arts, films,
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science and
they became
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famous
by
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theri
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parents
support and direction which was
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good
for them. In the another case, it can be stressful for
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adolescent
to
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live
on
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parents
expectations and it leads to feelings of timid,
also
they
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have to
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live
under pressure.

To sum up,
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parents
decide how the
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teenager
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develops
and the most significant thing is
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teenagers
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develop
diversely
and
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choose
right life road.
However
, it is
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important
to know that it is convenient for
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teenagers
whether
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parents
take into account the wishes of their
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children
and
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choose
the way of upbringing and development that suits
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teens’
nature and character.
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IELTS essay Do you think that teenagers should be left to develop naturally or should be directed towards what their parents think is good for them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of these methods

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
483 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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