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Do you think most people are happy at their jobs?

Do you think most people are happy at their jobs? pX2Gm
You know, this is a personal opinion and I know many people are still happy at their jobs. First, I would mention that “passion”. It means you just work happily if you have a passion for it. But I see that almost 60% of people work to make money to take care of themselves and help their parents, including me. There is a well - known statement: Only when you work with your passion can you happily enjoy 8 hours of work each day. Have you ever asked the question? Why don’t we choose a job which we love? . Actually, these jobs don't bring a stable income and are affected by many objective factors. However it still gives many joyful things in our life. Second, in fact a lot of students choose a major according to trends or parent's expectations. Until they go to work, they realize these jobs don't fit with them which make them stuffy. Third, If you type closed people, it is hard to get along with the office environment. It also is one of the reasons for not being interested in going to work. Besides, working in an unimaginative and lethargic situation also makes you bored. (Finally, instead of negative thoughts we should think about good values for your life. Giving your best effort to keep your passion. )
You know, this is a personal opinion and I know
many
people
are
still
happy at their jobs.

First
, I would mention that
“passion”
. It means you
just
work
happily
if you have a
passion
for it.
But
I
see
that almost 60% of
people
work
to
make
money to take care of themselves and
help
their parents, including me.

There is a well
-
known statement:
Only
when you
work
with your
passion
can you
happily
enjoy 8 hours of
work
each day.

Have you ever asked the question? Why don’t we choose a job which we
love
?
.
Actually, these jobs don't bring a stable income and are
affected
by
many
objective factors.
However
it
still
gives
many
joyful things in our life.

Second, in fact
a lot of
students choose a major according to trends or parent's expectations. Until they go to
work
, they realize these jobs don't fit with them which
make
them stuffy.

Third, If you type closed
people
, it is
hard
to
get
along with the office environment. It
also
is one of the reasons for not
being interested
in going to
work
.
Besides
, working in an unimaginative and lethargic situation
also
makes
you bored.

(
Finally
,
instead
of
negative
thoughts we should
think
about
good
values for your life. Giving your best effort to
keep
your
passion
.
)
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IELTS essay Do you think most people are happy at their jobs?

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