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Do you think it is better to live in the countryside or in the city?

Do you think it is better to live in the countryside or in the city? 1aL07
The places where people live affects greatly in their lifestyles and the living place is one of the very basic needs for people. People opine differently while choosing the living places. Some prefer and argue that city is the best place to live at since it provides so many advantages over the rural area, but other think that villages are the best places to live a good life. Both places have advantages and disadvantages. It is true that a city offers so many opportunities and advantages those are absent in a countryside. For instance, the modern transportation and communication systems are better in any city compared to a village. In a city people have access to many different transportation systems and have latest technologies to communicate; like cellular phones, internet, fax etc. Moreover, when a new technology arrives at the country it is first introduced in the city area and usually 2/3 years later to the village. Secondly, cities provide better security to its inhabitants like the mobile police patrols, special forces, community police, security guards, traffic police etc. But in the village, the number of security force persons are too low compared to the overall population. Moreover, cities provide better treatment, hospitals, qualified doctors, better educational institutes, and amusement parks etc which are really inevitable to lead a better life. In many cases, those facilities are absent or rare in a village. In my opinion, the reason for why most people tend to live in a city is the vast opportunities of jobs. Most of the corporate offices, industries, factories, government offices, garments and manufacturing industries are either situated in a city or close to the city. People have much more employment opportunities in a city than a village. On the contrary, people living in a village, are often forced to do a job that is not suitable at all for him since the job opportunity is so narrow there. Again, schools or colleges are not equipped with a better environment, labs, teachers and that's why students in a village might not get a better education he/she deserves. If we consider the entertainment facilities in a city then citizens of a city have so many options like theatre, park, art gallery, museum, amusement parks, libraries etc. But people in the villages have only TV or books and very little facilities to spend leisure time. On the other hand, Villages offer many invaluable advantages those are completely absent in the cities. First of all, someone living in a village can get fresh air and water. There is no intense pollution with smoke, Carbon-DI-oxide, Carbon-mono-oxide, Nitrous-Oxide and people living in a village are less prone to suffer diseases like asthma, bronchitis etc. The city can provide security against visible foes but it causes people to face some invisible and dangerous enemies like toxic and polluted air, water and environment. Secondly, people of villages live much nearer to the nature and breathe in the fresh air, as well as eat fresh foods, vegetables, fruits collected directly from the garden. On the contrary vegetables, foods, fruits in the cities are normally stored and mixed with preservatives and can cause serious harms to the health. The living cost in a countryside is much lesser than that of a city. The density of population in a village is much less than a city and village people are naturally grow up their personal relationship among all people and live like a real community and take care of each other. While in the city people do not know even who live in the next door and personal relationship in a community is rare. In my case, I prefer to live in the city. I feel relaxed and comfortable staying in my own city. There are lots of facilities I can't deny are presented in my city and those are the invaluable part of my lifestyle. Moreover, I like to lead a busy and challenging life and want to be connected with the world. I enjoy visiting countryside but get bored there if I stay more than 2/3 days because all of my necessary stuff to lead my as usual life are absent there.
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place
is one of the
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basic needs for
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prefer and argue that city is the best
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at since it
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provides
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so
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advantages
over the rural area,
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other
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think
that
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villages
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places
to
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advantages
and disadvantages.

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and
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those are
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absent
in a countryside.
For instance
, the modern transportation and communication systems are
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better
in any city compared to a
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village
. In a city
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people
have access to
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many
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different
transportation systems and have
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latest
technologies to communicate; like cellular phones, internet, fax etc.
Moreover
, when a new technology
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arrives at
the country it is
first
introduced in the city area and
usually
2/3 years later to the
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village
.
Secondly
,
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cities
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provide
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better
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security
to its inhabitants like the mobile police patrols, special forces, community police,
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security
guards, traffic police etc.
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But
in the
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village
, the number of
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security
force persons are too low compared to the
overall
population.
Moreover
,
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cities
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provide
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better
treatment, hospitals, qualified doctors,
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better
educational institutes, and amusement parks etc which are
really
inevitable to lead a
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better
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life
. In
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many
cases, those facilities are
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absent
or rare in a
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village
. In my opinion, the reason for why most
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people
tend to
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live
in a city is the vast
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opportunities
of jobs. Most of the corporate offices, industries, factories,
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government
offices, garments and manufacturing industries are either situated in a city or close to the city.
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People
have
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much
more employment
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opportunities
in a city than a
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village
.
On the contrary
,
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people
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living
in a
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village
, are
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often
forced to do a job
that is
not suitable at all for him since the job
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opportunity
is
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narrow there. Again, schools or colleges are not equipped with a
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better
environment, labs, teachers and that's why students in a
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village
might not
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get
a
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better
education he/she deserves. If we consider the entertainment facilities in a city then
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citizens
of a city have
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so
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many
options like
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theatre
, park, art gallery, museum, amusement parks, libraries etc.
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But
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people
in the
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villages
have
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only
TV or books and
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very
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little
facilities to spend leisure time.

On the other hand
,
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offer
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many
invaluable
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advantages
those are completely
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absent
in the
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cities
.
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First of all
, someone
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living
in a
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village
can
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get
fresh air and water. There is no intense pollution with smoke, Carbon-DI-oxide, Carbon-mono-oxide, Nitrous-Oxide and
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people
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living
in a
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village
are less prone to suffer diseases like asthma, bronchitis etc. The city can
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provide
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security
against visible foes
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but
it causes
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people
to face
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some
invisible and
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dangerous
enemies like toxic and polluted air, water and environment.
Secondly
,
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people
of
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villages
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live
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much
nearer to the nature and breathe in the fresh air,
as well
as eat fresh foods, vegetables, fruits collected
directly
from the garden.
On the contrary
vegetables, foods, fruits in the
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cities
are
normally
stored and mixed with preservatives and can cause serious harms to the health. The
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living
cost in a countryside is
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much
lesser than that of a city. The density of population in a
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village
is
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much
less than a city and
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village
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people
are
naturally
grow up their personal relationship among all
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people
and
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live
like a real community and take care of each other. While in the city
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people
do not know even who
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live
in the
next
door and personal relationship in a community is rare.

In my case, I prefer to
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live
in the city. I feel relaxed and comfortable staying in my
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own
city. There are lots of facilities I can't deny
are presented
in my city and those are the invaluable part of my lifestyle.
Moreover
, I like to lead a busy and challenging
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life
and want to
be connected
with the world. I enjoy visiting countryside
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but
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get
bored there if I stay more than 2/3 days
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because
all of my necessary stuff to lead my as usual
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life
are
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absent
there.
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IELTS essay Do you think it is better to live in the countryside or in the city?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
696 words
6.0
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