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Do you think it is better to live in the countryside or in a city. Discuss both views. v.2

Do you think it is better to live in the countryside or in a city. v. 2
In medieval times, people used to lead a simple life residing in villages and there was no concept of modern cities. However, in modern times, more and more people are moving to cities in search for better opportunities. Some people believe that country side living is better while others find city life more appealing. This essay will discuss benefits of both sorts of life. 12 There are various advantages that the country side residents can enjoy. Life in the countryside moves at a slow pace which means its inhabitants are more relaxed, less stressful and leads a peaceful life. Moreover, due to thin traffic or no traffic at all and absence of industries, there is less pollution and noise and clean environment is conducive to good health. Furthermore, in the countryside, communities are strong as community members know each other and neighbours have good relationships. Consequently, members can enjoy a good support network. Apart from that, residents of the countryside can enjoy owning a large and spacious house. On the other hand, living in the city has its own benefits. Citizens can benefit from better amenities. For example, in cities, there are better recreational and leisure facilities like restaurants, shopping malls, museums, opera houses etc. Moreover, there are better job prospects and opportunities in the cities and it is easier to get a good job. Furthermore, in cities, infrastructure is developed. For example, better public transport means that people can commute with ease and convenience. Finally, citizens can also benefit from world class educational facilities so that they could advance and improve their lives.
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people
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to lead a simple
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life
residing in villages and there was no concept of modern
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cities
.
However
, in modern times, more and more
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people
are moving to
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cities
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better
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better
while others find city
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life
more appealing. This essay will discuss
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benefits
of both sorts of
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life
. 12

There are various advantages that the country side residents can enjoy.
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Life
in the countryside
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moves
at a slow pace which means its inhabitants are more relaxed, less stressful and leads a peaceful
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life
.
Moreover
, due to thin traffic or no traffic at all and absence of industries, there is less pollution and noise and clean environment is conducive to
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good
health.
Furthermore
, in the countryside, communities are strong as community members know each other and
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neighbours
have
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good
relationships.
Consequently
, members can enjoy a
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good
support network. Apart from that, residents of the countryside can enjoy owning a large and spacious
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house
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, living in the city has its
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benefits
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from
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better
amenities.
For example
, in
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cities
, there are
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better
recreational and leisure facilities like restaurants, shopping malls, museums, opera
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houses
etc.
Moreover
, there are
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better
job prospects and opportunities in the
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cities
and it is easier to
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get
a
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good
job.
Furthermore
, in
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cities
, infrastructure
is developed
.
For example
,
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better
public transport means that
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people
can commute with
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ease
and convenience.
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, citizens can
also
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from world
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class
educational facilities
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that they could advance and
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11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Do you think it is better to live in the countryside or in a city. v. 2

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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