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Do you have a large family or small family?

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I live in a nuclear family of 4, including my parents, my younger sister and me. I just have one sister who’s three years youngest than me. I get along with my sister because we have lots of in common My mother has always been a good role model for me to follow. She’s industrious, patient and understanding; she’s also got a good sense of humour and seems to get along with everybody. Fortunately, I’ve inherited some of these character traits. I think she brought up me and my siblings well; she was quite strict but always fair. Despite the fact that I am the youngest child in the family, she never pampers me. Besides, She set a good example by working hard and having an optimistic outlook on life. I vividly remember that she used to leave home for work early and come home quite late, but she always made time for me and my siblings. That’s why I idolize her who could maintain a healthy work-life balance. Now my mother is at her retirement and has more time for the family. But, unfortunately, I’ve been living far from home, so we have very little quality time with each other these days. That’s why whenever I get back home on weekends, I make sure to spend most of my time cooking, eating, watching TV, and having idle chit-chat with my mom. I can confide everything to her, things like my study, my work or even my relationship. She’s always been someone who I can turn to for advice.
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I
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along with my sister
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we have lots of in common My mother has always been a
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role model for me to follow.
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industrious, patient and understanding;
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of these character traits.

I
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brought up me and my siblings well;
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was quite strict
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always
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. Despite the fact that I am the youngest child in the family,
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never pampers me.
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set a
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and having an optimistic outlook on life. I
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home quite late,
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always made
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for me and my siblings. That’s why I idolize her who could maintain a healthy work-life balance.

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my mother is at her retirement and has more
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for the family.
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, unfortunately, I’ve been living far from home,
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quality
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with each other these days. That’s why whenever I
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get
back home on weekends, I
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make
sure to spend most of my
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time
cooking, eating, watching TV, and having idle chit-chat with my mom. I can confide everything to her, things like my study, my work or even my relationship.
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She’s
always been someone who I can turn to for advice.
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IELTS essay Do you have a large family or small family?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
259 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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