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Do you agree with the statement that you can return a gift that you got and exchange it with money or something else? Is that going to affect the person who gave it to you. Personally, I think that returning the gift that was given to you is not a good ide v.1

that you can return a gift that you got and exchange it with money or something else? Is that going to affect the person who gave it to you. Personally, I think that returning the gift that was given to you is not a good ide v. 1
One of the most significant current discussion on the education relates, whether free education can have a positive effect or it is a wrong idea. This essay discusses this view and shed some light on it and expands my opinion. In recent years, much more attitude have demonstrated on university education that can attract more students if it become free. First of all, one argument that makes it more strong is this world as are changing and developing, needs more educated guys. In this century, technology cannot stop for people who are not knowledgeable and they have to adopt themselves with these progress. Secondary, having educated people has considerable impact on their life and society. University is an important place for learning, but the expensive tuition fee is not affordable for everyone and makes some people upset and prefer to find some jobs which do not need any specific knowledge. So they have to spend entire of their life without any significant change. In the other hand, some people are completely opposite of free educations. They believe that if a person is interested to continue her/his education, can find a solution. With free teaching, the student cannot find the worth of university, so they would not try to get higher score and be successful. They just like to spend their time in the university instead of studying deeply every module. Generally, therefore, it seems both ideas have some positive and negative reflect on their society. In conclusion, in my point of view, it would be better if universities have a moderate and reasonable tuition fee for students who are really eager to continue their learning and reach for their dreams.
One of the most significant
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current
discussion on the
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education
relates, whether
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free
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education
can have a
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positive
effect or it is a
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wrong
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idea
. This essay discusses this view and shed
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some
light on it and expands my opinion.

In recent years, much more attitude have demonstrated on
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university
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education
that can attract more students if it
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become
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free
.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, one argument that
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makes
it more strong is this world as are changing and developing, needs more educated guys. In this century, technology cannot
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stop
for
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people
who are not
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knowledgeable and
they
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have to
adopt themselves with these progress. Secondary, having educated
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people
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has
considerable impact on their life and society.
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University
is an
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important
place for learning,
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but
the expensive tuition fee is not affordable for everyone and
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makes
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some
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people
upset and prefer to find
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some
jobs which do not need any specific knowledge.
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they
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have to
spend entire of their life without any significant
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change
.

In the other hand,
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some
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people
are completely opposite of
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free
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educations
. They believe that if a person
is interested
to continue her/his
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education
, can find a solution. With
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free
teaching, the student cannot find the worth of
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university
,
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so
they would not try to
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get
higher score and be successful. They
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just
like to spend their time in the
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university
instead
of studying
deeply
every module.
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,
therefore
, it seems both
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ideas
have
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some
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positive
and
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negative
reflect on their society.

In conclusion
, in my point of view, it would be better if
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universities
have a moderate and reasonable tuition fee for students who are
really
eager to continue their learning and reach for their dreams.
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IELTS essay that you can return a gift that you got and exchange it with money or something else? Is that going to affect the person who gave it to you. Personally, I think that returning the gift that was given to you is not a good ide v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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