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 Do you agree professional athletes such as the football player and basketball player deserve high salaries to be paid?

 Do you agree professional athletes such as the football player and basketball player deserve high salaries to be paid? d3lo7
What kinds of ‘’work’’ deserve high salaries? In my country, people will have answers such as doctors, lawyers, and engineers, who need to absorb a lot of knowledge. In other words, being clever and extraordinary. However, in my opinion, people who have special skills deserve high payment. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay. In conclusion, I believe that professional athletes deserve a generous salary package. Under such condition, it) can offer them a more friendly environment to strive for their dreams. Furthermore, they may have their own family that they need to take care of. Thus, high salaries can be an essential financial support for them.
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can offer them a more friendly environment to strive for their dreams.
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IELTS essay  Do you agree professional athletes such as the football player and basketball player deserve high salaries to be paid?

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
115 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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