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do you agree or disagree with this statementstudents are more influenced by their teacher rather than their their friends. v.1

tudents are more influenced by their teacher rather than their their friends. v. 1
In some countries, large chain stores are developed so some small stores are closed. Means small stores can’t compete with large stores. This essay will take on the positive aspects these stores can have and also the negative effects on the small stores. Evidence suggests chain stores can help to the people to find the Commodity they need. Means chain stores is that they generally offer a wider selection of products than smaller ones. Locally owned businesses do. This allows it to offer a greater variety of products on the store shelves and sell products in their stores at lower prices. For example, when families go to large stores, they can buy everything such as toys for children or food. The main reason is people can trust the stores and buy the original thing, however if people buy something destroyed or expire, they can change the material or something. Some young don’t enough money to start small stores, but they can find a job in large stores and earn money. However, when chain stores are developed, the small stores are closed and some people are unemployed. The second disadvantage is small stores are in near homes, but large stores are in the centre of town. So people should travel to buy something like eggs. Chain stores cannot offer personalized services that small stores can. Summery, considering the points discussed above, there are both advantages and disadvantages to large chain stores but the advantages seem to more disadvantages said in the introduction.
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are developed
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are closed
. Means
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small
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can’t compete with
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large
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stores
. This essay will take on the
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positive
aspects these
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stores
can have and
also
the
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negative
effects on the
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small
stores.

Evidence suggests
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chain
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can
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help
to the
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people
to find the Commodity they need. Means
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chain
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stores
is that they
generally
offer a wider selection of products than smaller ones.
Locally
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owned
businesses do. This
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allows
it to offer a greater variety of products on the
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store
shelves and sell products in their
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stores
at lower prices.
For example
, when families go to
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large
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, they can
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buy
everything such as toys for children or food. The main reason is
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people
can trust the
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stores
and
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buy
the original thing,
however
if
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people
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buy
something
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destroyed
or expire, they can
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change
the material or something.
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young don’t
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enough
money to
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start
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,
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they can find a job in
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and earn money.

However
, when
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are developed
, the
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are closed
and
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some
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people
are unemployed
. The second disadvantage is
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small
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are in near homes,
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but
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large
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are in the
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centre
of town.
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people
should travel to
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buy
something like eggs.
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Chain
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stores
cannot offer personalized services that
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small
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stores
can.

Summery, considering the points discussed above, there are both advantages and disadvantages to
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large
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chain
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stores
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but
the advantages seem to more disadvantages said in the introduction.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay tudents are more influenced by their teacher rather than their their friends. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
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