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Do you agree or disagree with this statement; Grades encourage students to learn. Give a particular reason to support. v.1

; Grades encourage students to learn. Give a particular reason to support. v. 1
No doubts, schools are considered to be the best source of learning and education in people' s lives. Some people believe that grades and exams are an instrumental part of pupils' success. In contrary, others disagree. As far as I am concerned, force a student to have exams and judge his/her educational level depending on it, is wrong. In my opinion, when school depends on grading their kids, it teaches them learning for the final exam only, add stress to their study lives, and it is unfair if the date of that exam is inappropriate. Following are a brief explanation of my view. Firstly, schools that focus on grading their students and put them on exams encourage their kids to study for passing that exam only. Their students are studying not for learning but for obtaining the higher scores. Consequently, they would adopt a way to memorize the subjects only for the day of the test and do not care about the knowledge of the information or even concerned about participating in the class. In fact, they would lose the benefit from their materials. For instance, my high school teaching curriculum used to force my peers and me to take the final exams. I remember how we did not care about doing the homework or sharing in the class. Finally, we passed those tough exams; but, within a short time, we do not remember any single details of the subject. Secondly, this procedure undoubtedly adds a lot of stress and pressure for those kids and young adults' live. Because of that no one cares if you are smart or an intelligent person. They judge your level upon your score. Any mark bellows the level means you are a fool person. For example, I remember my parents were always comparing my scores with my cousin' s grades. They wanted to be proud of me. Unfortunately, I can not have the highest marks; sometimes he was better than me. At that moment, they showed me their disappointing, and that was honestly pretty stressful. My school was not the place of learning and fun. My daily eight hours that I spent at the school was like a nightmare. Finally, I think it is unfair to give the student one day to put all his nine months on a sheet of paper or a computer screen depending on the each schools' way of teaching. What if that student went sick on that date? What if he/she has something prevented him from attending that exam? Do you think his failure would be fair? . For example, one day at my alma mater, I remember I had my organic chemistry mid-year exam. I had some family issue that prevented me from attending that review. Unfortunately, my professor graded me zero. I was so smart. I preferred that subject, and that score broke my level at the final and destroyed me for my entire life after that. In conclusion, I completely disagree of grading students. I think it is not a proficient educational method of teaching because students will study for success only, perhaps it would add a lot of pressure for those young individuals and it is unfair to give those pupils one day to test their educational level.
No doubts,
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schools
are considered
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learning
and education in
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people
believe that grades and exams are an instrumental part of
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pupils&
#039; success. In contrary, others disagree. As far as I
am concerned
, force a
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student
to have exams and judge his/her educational
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level
depending on it, is
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wrong
. In my opinion, when
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school
depends on grading their kids, it teaches them
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learning
for the final exam
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only
,
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add
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stress
to their study
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lives
, and it is unfair if the date of that exam is inappropriate. Following are a brief explanation of my view.

Firstly
,
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schools
that focus on grading their
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students
and put them on exams encourage their kids to study for passing that exam
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only
. Their
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students
are studying not for
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learning
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but
for obtaining the higher
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scores
.
Consequently
, they would adopt a way to memorize the subjects
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only
for the day of the
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test
and do not care about the knowledge of the information or even concerned about participating in the
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class
. In fact, they would lose the benefit from their materials.
For instance
, my high
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school
teaching curriculum
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used
to force my peers and me to take the final exams. I
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remember
how we did not care about doing the homework or sharing in the
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class
.
Finally
, we passed those tough exams;
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but
, within a short time, we do not
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remember
any single
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details
of the subject.

Secondly
, this procedure
undoubtedly
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adds
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a lot of
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stress
and pressure for those kids and young
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adults&
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live
.
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Because
of that no one cares if you are smart or an intelligent person. They judge your
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level
upon your
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score
. Any mark bellows the
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level
means you are a fool person.
For example
, I
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remember
my parents were always comparing my
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scores
with my
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cousin&
#039; s grades. They wanted to be proud of me. Unfortunately, I can not have the highest marks;
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sometimes
he was better than
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me
. At that moment, they
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showed
me their disappointing, and that was
honestly
pretty stressful. My
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school
was not the place of
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learning
and fun. My daily eight hours that I spent at the
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school
was like a nightmare.

Finally
, I
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think
it is unfair to give the
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student
one day to put all his nine months on a sheet of paper or a computer screen depending on
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the each
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schools&
#039; way of teaching. What if that
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student
went sick on that date? What if he/she has something
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prevented
him from attending that exam? Do you
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think
his failure would be
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fair
?
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For example
, one day at my alma mater, I
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remember
I had my organic chemistry mid-year exam. I had
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some
family issue that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevented
me from attending that review. Unfortunately, my professor graded me zero. I was
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so
smart. I preferred that subject, and that
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score
broke my
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level
at the final and
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destroyed
me for my entire life after that.

In conclusion
, I completely disagree of grading
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students
. I
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think
it is not a proficient educational method of teaching
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because
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students
will study for success
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only
, perhaps it would
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add
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a lot of
pressure for those young individuals and it is unfair to give those pupils one day to
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test
their educational
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level
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay ; Grades encourage students to learn. Give a particular reason to support. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
543 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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