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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A goos sense of humor is one of the most important human qualities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.322

A goos sense of humor is one of the most important human qualities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 322
For many years TV has been the favoured media for popular entertainment and news by a great majority of people, but there are increasing numbers of other people who prefer radio and I entirely agree with the latter view. First, TV provides both audio and visual impact. Furthermore, television combined with advancing technologies such as AI and 3D fulfils the demands of audiences with a variety of media to choose from. But, there is no doubt the moving picture experience and animation can also ruin our imagination. For this reason, most of the televised series adapted from novels often receives negative comments. People who have read the books already hold the story in their minds with set images for all the characters and scenarios. As a result, when they see the same scenes dramatised visually. This can make it hard for the viewer to match what they imagined with the adaptations they see. Though radio does not offer any visual imagery it does have its own unique appeal which I wish to follow up on. Firstly, the voices and sound effects alone can inspire audiences to think about related events in their own lives or a novel they have read, or for that matter to let their minds run wild. Secondly, it gives people the virtue and space to imagine and create visualisations in their minds independently. Besides, compared with viewing programs, listening options are more available and accessible to most of us. It is easy to illustrate. You only need to think about the situation on your way home while commuting, it is likely you turn on the radio application your phone has rather than the video. In conclusion, it is fair to state that on balance the two mediums both have their advantages and disadvantages, one may offer visual spectacle, but limits the imagination of the audience while the other enhances it. Personally, listening is more enjoyable and practical than watching programmes most of the time.
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years TV has been the
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favoured
media for popular entertainment and news by a great majority of
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people
,
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but
there are increasing numbers of other
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people
who prefer radio and I
entirely
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agree
with the latter view.

First
, TV provides both audio and visual impact.
Furthermore
, television combined with advancing technologies such as AI and 3D
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fulfils
the demands of audiences with a variety of media to choose from.
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But
, there is no doubt the moving picture experience and animation can
also
ruin our imagination.
For this reason
, most of the televised series adapted from novels
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often
receives
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negative
comments.
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People
who have read the books already hold the story in their minds with set images for all the characters and scenarios.
As a result
, when they
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see
the same scenes
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dramatised
visually
. This can
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make
it
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hard
for the viewer to match what they imagined with the adaptations they
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see
.

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Though
radio does not offer any visual imagery it does have its
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unique appeal which I wish to follow up on.
Firstly
, the voices and sound effects alone can inspire audiences to
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think
about related
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events
in their
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own
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lives
or a novel they have read, or for that matter to
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let
their minds run wild.
Secondly
, it gives
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people
the virtue and space to imagine and create
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visualisations
in their minds
independently
.
Besides
, compared with viewing programs, listening options are more available and accessible to most of us. It is easy to illustrate. You
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only
need to
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think
about the situation on your way home while commuting, it is likely you turn on the radio application your phone has
rather
than the video.

In conclusion
, it is
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fair
to state that on balance the two mediums both have their advantages and disadvantages, one may offer visual spectacle,
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but
limits the imagination of the audience while the other enhances it.
Personally
, listening is more enjoyable and practical than watching
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programmes
most of the time.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A goos sense of humor is one of the most important human qualities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 322

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
328 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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