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Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. v.16

Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. v. 16
Nowadays, no one can deny the importance of happiness in the life. Some people may hold the opinion that people have less happiness than the past because changing the world is too fast. But others have a negative attitude. As far as I am concerned, obviously, today we have more ways to experience happiness rather than the past. My reasons and samples listed below will demonstrate my point according to the most common viewpoints. First let us look at the amusement that we have today. Unlike the past that people had a fewer number of entertainments, today we can go to the modern cinemas, exciting parks, many resturants and watching 3d films. By way of illustration, my father told me one day about his hobbies during the childhood which was only palying with other children in the yard and they did not have any kind of amusement during the night time. On the other hand, I have many option to have more happiness if I become boring. There is also a more subtle point we must consider. Thanks to many discoveries people have more facilities during their life which bring more satisfication for them such as faster transportation or cooking easier foods. Taking six decades ago for example, there are not suitable airplanes and trains. So, if people had to go every where, they must spent too much time. Needless to say, these covienient means provide more happiness among peolpe nowadays. Finally, I cannot oversee the fact that the healthy life in the world is changing so quickly too. It goes without saying that, people are healtheir now and helthy condition is good index for researchers to prove that people who lived in the past had lower satification. To shed more light on the issue, according to the result of the study done in Tehran University, today happiness index is five time better than 40 years ago. Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always some exceptions which are excluded from the general rule, I do agree thet the people have more happiness and satisfication with their lives than people were in the past.
Nowadays, no one can deny the importance of
happiness
in the life.
Some
people
may hold the opinion that
people
have less
happiness
than the
past
because
changing the world is too
fast
.
But
others have a
negative
attitude. As far as I
am concerned
,
obviously
,
today
we have more ways to experience
happiness
rather
than the
past
. My reasons and samples listed below will demonstrate my point according to the most common viewpoints.

First
let
us look at the amusement that we have
today
. Unlike the
past
that
people
had a fewer number of entertainments,
today
we can go to the modern cinemas, exciting parks,
many
resturants
and watching 3d films. By way of illustration, my father
told
me one day about his hobbies during the childhood which was
only
palying
with other children in the
yard and
they did not have any kind of amusement during the
night time
.
On the other hand
, I have
many option
to have more
happiness
if I become boring.

There is
also
a more subtle point we
must
consider. Thanks to
many
discoveries
people
have more facilities during their life which bring more
satisfication
for them such as faster transportation or cooking easier foods. Taking six decades ago
for example
, there are not suitable airplanes and trains.
So
, if
people
had to go
every where
, they
must
spent too much time. Needless to say, these
covienient
means provide more
happiness
among
peolpe
nowadays.

Finally
, I cannot oversee the fact that the healthy life in the world is changing
so
quickly
too. It goes without saying that,
people
are
healtheir
now
and
helthy
condition is
good
index for researchers to prove that
people
who
lived
in the
past
had lower
satification
. To shed more light on the issue, according to the result of the study done in Tehran University,
today
happiness
index is five time better than 40 years ago.

Drawing upon the reasons, although there are always
some
exceptions which
are excluded
from the general
rule
, I do
agree
thet
the
people
have more
happiness
and
satisfication
with their
lives
than
people
were in the
past
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS essay Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past. v. 16

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
354 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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