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Do you agree or disagree with the followingstatement? it is better to have broad knowledge ofmany academic subjects than to specialize inone specific subject. Use specific reasons and examples tosupport your answer. v.2

it is better to have broad knowledge ofmany academic subjects than to specialize inone specific subject. Use specific reasons and examples tosupport your answer. v. 2
To answer this question it seems to be necessary to make clear, for what aspect of life the knowledge in general should be good. On the one hand you might think that knowledge should be useful for the success in your job or at school. On the other hand you maybe understand knowledge as a part of the human existence, that allows us to think critically and to reflect about our life which includes the whole environment surrounding us. I want to respond the question from the second point of view. Knowledge has to be understood as much more than the ability to function in a special kind of business environment. Knowledge is the sum of all the theoretical facts and experiences a human being collects during his or her whole life. And from this position a knowledge as broad as possible must be accepted as the better alternative. I think that it will become a very big problem in our society when we continue to concentrate the whole educational system — especially the schools — only on teaching specific subjects. Of course it is actually is very important for young people to have the right preparation for the business world. But as I already said, life must focus on much more than the economic aspect. Even if you think that the preparation for the business world should be the main aspect of acquiring knowledge, you should still agree with the statement, because when you really analyse the requirements of work that are typical in our time, you will realize that the technologies and the methods change so quickly, that it would be a very big mistake to concentrate on a specific subject. You would always have the danger that if you concentrate on a specialized part of human knowledge, that part might become completely unimportant in the nearest future. Nowadays it seems to be useful to be able to program computers. Yet in some years computers might have the ability to program themselves. When you have a broad knowledge than you will be able to handle all the new things that you might get confronted with. And you will not only be able to handle them — but you will have the possibility to fully understand them and take part in their development. Not only as a passive part but as a creator of your own future
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necessary to
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make
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clear
, for what aspect of life

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the
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knowledge
in general
should be
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good
. On

the one hand you
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might
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think
that knowledge

should be useful for the success in your job

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or
at school.
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you
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maybe


understand
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knowledge
as a
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part
of the human

existence, that
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allows
us to
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think
critically
and

to reflect about our life which includes the

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whole
environment surrounding us.

I want to respond the question from the

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second
point of view.
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Knowledge
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has to
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be


understood as much more than the ability to

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function
in a special kind of business environment.

Knowledge is the sum of all the

theoretical facts and experiences a human

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being
collects during
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his or her
whole life.

And from this position a
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knowledge
as broad

as possible
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must
be
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accepted
as the better

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alternative
.

I
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think
that it will become a
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very
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big


problem in our society when we continue to

concentrate the whole educational system —

especially
the schools —
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only
on teaching

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specific
subjects. Of
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course it
is actually is
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very


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important
for young
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people
to have the right

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preparation
for the business world.
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But
as
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I


already said, life
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must
focus on much more

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than
the economic aspect.

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you
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think
that the preparation

for the business world should be the main

aspect of acquiring
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knowledge
, you should
still


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agree
with the statement,
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because
when you

really
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analyse
the requirements of work that

are typical in our time, you will realize that

the technologies and the methods
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change
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so


quickly
, that it would be a
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very
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big
mistake to

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concentrate
on a specific subject. You
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would


always have the
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danger
that if you concentrate

on a specialized
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part
of human knowledge,

that
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part
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might
become completely unimportant

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in
the nearest future. Nowadays it
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seems


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to
be useful to be able to program computers.

Yet
in
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some
years computers
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might
have the

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ability
to program themselves.

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When
you have a broad
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knowledge
than

you will be able to handle all the new things

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that
you
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might
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get
confronted with. And
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you


will not
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only
be able to handle them —
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but
you

will have the possibility to
fully
understand

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them
and take
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part
in their development. Not

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only
as a passive
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part
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but
as a creator of your

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own
future
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
30Mistakes

IELTS essay it is better to have broad knowledge ofmany academic subjects than to specialize inone specific subject. Use specific reasons and examples tosupport your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
53 paragraphs
397 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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