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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Overall the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today s world Use reasons and details to support your opinion v.1

Overall the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today s world Use reasons and details to support your opinion v. 1
Proliferating use of digital instruments in educational institutes comes with a range of advantages and disadvantages. This essay disagrees that advantages are stronger than disadvantages because students are prone to misuse electronic devices rather than use it in a justifiable way. Briefing about the positive aspects of school students using these electronic devices, one evident point is that students do not have to carry different materials for several subjects they study in school. For instance, students study a plethora of subjects nowadays in schools. For them to carry books and supplies for all of those subjects is definitely arduous. Secondly, the Internet is undoubtedly one of the most significant developments in the past decades. These electronic devices come equipped with Internet accessing facilities. The Internet helps the student to access important extra information regarding anything. The Internet could be of great aid for students. On the other hand, talking about the disadvantages, first among them is the health hazard of using electronic devices would adversely affect the eyesight of the students. According to the recent trend more than 50% of the students below the age of 18 are getting affected by myopia at a very early age. Another reason would be the same Internet, which is advantageous for students has some serious issues with it. Several youngsters are not mature enough to know what is right for them and what is not. The internet is filled with pornographic content as well as some derogatory articles. This could adversely affect students while studying. In conclusion, though, there are significant advantages of using tablets and laptop computers for students. Still, in my opinion, school students are not mature enough to understand what is best for them. These devices can be introduced in student life in high school or maybe during their university lives.
Proliferating
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use
of digital instruments in educational institutes
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comes
with a range of advantages and disadvantages. This essay disagrees that advantages are stronger than disadvantages
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because
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students
are prone to misuse
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electronic
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devices
rather
than
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use
it
Consider replacing "in a justifiable way" with the adverb for "justifiable"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a justifiable way
.

Briefing about the
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positive
aspects of
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school
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students
using these
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electronic
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devices
, one evident point is that
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students
do not
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have to
carry
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different
materials for several subjects they study in
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school
.
For instance
,
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students
study a plethora of subjects nowadays in
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schools
. For them to carry books and supplies for all of those subjects is definitely arduous.
Secondly
, the Internet is
undoubtedly
one of the most significant developments in the past decades. These
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electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
devices
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come
equipped with Internet accessing facilities. The Internet
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helps
the
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student
to access
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important
extra information regarding anything. The Internet could be of great aid for students.

On the other hand
, talking about the disadvantages,
first
among them is the health hazard of using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
devices
would
adversely
affect the eyesight of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
. According to the recent trend more than 50% of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
below the age of 18 are getting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
by myopia at a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
early age. Another reason would be the same Internet, which is advantageous for
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students
has
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some
serious issues with it. Several youngsters are not mature
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enough
to know what is right for them and what is not. The internet
is filled
with pornographic content
as well
as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
derogatory articles. This could
adversely
affect
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students
while studying.

In conclusion
, though, there are significant advantages of using tablets and laptop computers for
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students
.
Still
, in my opinion,
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school
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students
are not mature
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to understand what is best for them. These
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
devices
can
be introduced
in
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student
life in high
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school
or maybe during their university
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lives
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Overall the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today s world Use reasons and details to support your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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