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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement High school students should wear uniforms to schools v.2

High school students should wear uniforms to schools v. 2
Wearing uniform has been a compulsory part of the traditional school for so long a time. Many people believe that school uniforms are essential for all students. Personally, i fully agree with this point of view For a variety of reasons, the school uniform is reportedly a symbol of equality. This is shown by the uniformity of colors, designs and materials. It would seem that wearing uniform help students avoid the wealth gap. By way of illustration, without the uniform polices the students born into poor family may have to wear secondhand clothes to school. Naturally, they will have the inferiority complex due to family circumstance and their background. Moreover, there seem to be some evidence that school uniforms contribute to make a reduction in bullying. For instance, the school which strictly enforce the uniform policies experience fewer incidence of bullying as potential bullies find it harder to identify their targets. Another point to consider is that school uniforms enhance school pride. Students are allegedly feeling of belonging to a bigger community when they wear uniform. There is every likelihood that this outfit provides students with a sense of unity which brings a bond that allows them to feel closer and more connected. This was true of interscholastic sport events when all the competitors try the best for their colours. The school uniform is also the root of school spirit. It cultivates spirit of teamwork and allows students to see the value of collective team effort rather than the individual. To sum up, wearing school uniform is an equality symbol which deters wealth gap and bullying. It also raises the school pridefulness and the cooperativeness
Wearing
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has been a compulsory part of the traditional
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school
for
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long a time.
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people
believe that
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school
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uniforms
are essential for all
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students
.
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i
fully
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with this point of view

For a variety of reasons, the
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school
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uniform
is reportedly a symbol of equality. This
is shown
by the uniformity of colors, designs and materials. It would seem that wearing
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uniform
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help
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students
avoid the wealth gap. By way of illustration, without the
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uniform
polices the
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students
born into poor family may
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have to
wear secondhand clothes to
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school
.
Naturally
, they will have the inferiority complex due to family circumstance and their background.
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, there seem to be
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evidence that
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school
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uniforms
contribute to
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make
a reduction in bullying.
For instance
, the
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which
strictly
enforce the
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uniform
policies experience fewer incidence of bullying as potential bullies find it harder to identify their targets.

Another point to consider is that
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enhance
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pride.
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Students
are allegedly feeling of belonging to a bigger community when they wear
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uniform
. There is every likelihood that this outfit provides
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students
with a sense of unity which brings a bond that
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allows
them to feel closer and more connected. This was true of interscholastic sport
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events
when all the competitors try the best for their
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colours
. The
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school
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uniform
is
also
the root of
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school
spirit. It cultivates spirit of teamwork and
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allows
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students
to
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see
the value of collective team effort
rather
than the individual.

To sum up, wearing
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school
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uniform
is an equality symbol which deters wealth gap and bullying. It
also
raises the
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school
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pridefulness
and the
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cooperativeness
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay High school students should wear uniforms to schools v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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