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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Good teachers assign difficult activities to students. v.1

: Good teachers assign difficult activities to students. v. 1
It is true that because of traveling by air has become more affordable, more people are going abroad for their vacations instead of spending time in their own country. In this essay, I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of this trend. On the one hand, discounted air flying gives people more opportunities to transit abroad more frequently. Firstly, having an abroad trip could give local citizen chances to broaden new horizons; for example, they could make new friends with foreigners or promote cultural exchange and mutual understanding. Secondly, people can save money for other expenditure like food or shopping when while travelling on economical travelling. When the fare of airline tickets are cut down on, people will have more opportunities to visit other countries that are far from their own country. For example, students in developing countries like Vietnam could have organized trips to developing nations such as America because of low fare air trip. On the other hand, although the low-cost of air travel provide low priced tickets for people to go abroad for their holidays, this could bring drawbacks to their country's tourism industry. The local visitors indeed play a vital role in promoting the development of a country. To be specific, if the number of local citizens visiting places in their own country is decreased dramatically, the revenue of the whole country's tourism industry will be reduced. As a result, the amount of money spent on promoting and advertising these places to foreigners will be restricted, which results in bad outcomes for local people. In conclusion, there are both advantages and disadvantages for the fact that more people spend their holidays abroad instead of their own country because of the low fare air tickets.
It is true that
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because
of traveling by
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air
has become more affordable, more
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people
are going
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abroad
for their vacations
instead
of spending time in their
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own
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country
. In this essay, I will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

On the one hand, discounted
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air
flying gives
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people
more opportunities to transit
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abroad
more
frequently
.
Firstly
, having an
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abroad
trip could give
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local
citizen chances to broaden new horizons;
for example
, they could
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make
new friends with foreigners or promote cultural exchange and mutual understanding.
Secondly
,
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people
can save money for other expenditure like food or shopping when while travelling on economical travelling. When the fare of airline tickets are
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cut
down on,
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people
will have more opportunities to visit other
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countries
that are far from their
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own
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country
.
For example
, students in developing
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countries
like Vietnam could have organized trips to developing nations such as America
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because
of low fare
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air
trip.

On the other hand
, although the low-cost of
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air
travel provide low priced tickets for
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people
to go
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abroad
for their holidays, this could bring drawbacks to their country's tourism industry. The
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local
visitors
indeed
play a vital role in promoting the development of a
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country
. To be specific, if the number of
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local
citizens visiting places in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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country
is decreased
dramatically
, the revenue of the whole country's tourism industry will be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
.
As a result
, the amount of money spent on promoting and advertising these places to foreigners will
be restricted
, which results in
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bad
outcomes for
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local
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people
.

In conclusion
, there are both advantages and disadvantages for the fact that more
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people
spend their holidays
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abroad
instead
of their
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own
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country
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because
of the low fare
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air
tickets.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay : Good teachers assign difficult activities to students. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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