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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.843

Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 843
Learning is unstoppable process and education can be said synonymous of learning. Which begins from education institutions strolling learners toward the valley of wisdom cumulating lucrative future and luxurious life. Undoubtingly when rewards are foreseen the zeal of toiling hard becomes stronger. And every hard effort promise a reward whether it is grades, good –salaried job or any other prize. Grading system encourage students towards putting fervent and unabating efforts in the course of learning process. Reasons based on personal, psychological and educational aspect well explain the necessity of grades in education sector. Everybody expect a good return form their investment; let it be a shareholder or a student. Efforts made to reach indistinct destination are futile. Similarly grades are rewards for students, which give them assessment of their hard work, strength, and skills abreast drawing their attention toward the areas and aspect, where they need to put more efforts. It helps them improve themselves. I would like to share an incident of my personal life – I was taking personality development classes by Sir kopekar, his sessions would only consist 10 students per class, at the end of his class he used to conduct an activity, wherein all the students would stick a paper on each other’s back and write three good or bad criticism on paper adhered on every student’s back. The student who would overcome his maximum week areas will be getting 5 bonus points in final exam. Which prevail tuff competition and proactivity of learning among students for entire period of course. It was quit productivity session I attended ever, it is even helping me currently in all aspect of my life. Moreover the thrust of triumph can be quenched by rewards. On personal and education basis, I sometime think- how difficult it would be to differentiate students’ performance, if education sector exclude the grading system. No student will be identified as brilliant, average or below average. Grading system boost competitive spirit, zest and motivation among students. Many time it’s because of grading system student realizes he has better potential of learning which give them confidence to move further towards studies. I was teaching as volunteer teacher to 9th grade in municipal school, as a project for my management course, but student were not aware of that fact, I used to take a class test every week although those test didn’t had any impact on students final score. A student named Suresh always topped the tests and in remark I always used to write” keep studying, keep growing” fallowing 5 stars. After 3 months when my project got over, I got honor of helping class teacher of 9th grade for parents – teacher meeting, I perceived Suresh parents not much interested about his further studies as no member of their family had been to school or had any education. But when I showed his father his grade, and discussed about his ability and consistent excellent performance, and when his class- teacher gave my example and explained that I am also a student, who was teaching 9th grade students as my project and will be getting lucrative job soon on completion of my course. They wanted Suresh to study further. Grades give recognition to student’s ability and performance. Our education legislation are designed keeping its effect on students; so far grading system has been proved immensely beneficial for learner and it’s because of grades student cans sale themselves to competitive corporations and companies. Without grading system, education will be merely an activity to perform.
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Learning
is unstoppable process and
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education
can
be said
synonymous of
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learning
. Which
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begins
from
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education
institutions strolling learners toward the valley of wisdom cumulating lucrative future and luxurious life.
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Undoubtingly
when rewards are foreseen the zeal of toiling
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hard
becomes stronger. And every
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hard
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effort
promise a reward whether it is
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grades
,
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good
–salaried job or any other prize.
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Grading
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system
encourage
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students
towards putting fervent and
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unabating
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efforts
in the
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course
of
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learning
process. Reasons based on personal, psychological and educational aspect well
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explain
the necessity of
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grades
in
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education
sector.

Everybody
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expect
a
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good
return form their investment;
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let
it be a shareholder or a
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student
.
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Efforts
made to reach indistinct destination are futile.
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Similarly
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grades
are rewards for
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students
, which give them assessment of their
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hard
work, strength, and
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skills
abreast drawing their attention toward the areas and aspect, where they need to put more
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efforts
. It
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helps
them
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improve
themselves. I would like to share an incident of my personal life
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–
I was taking personality development
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classes
by Sir
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kopekar
, his sessions would
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only
consist 10
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students
per
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class
, at the
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end
of his
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class
he
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used
to conduct an activity, wherein all the
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students
would stick a paper on each other’s back and write three
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good
or
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bad
criticism on paper adhered on every
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student’s
back. The
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student
who would overcome his maximum week areas will be getting 5 bonus points in final exam. Which prevail
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tuff
competition and proactivity of
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learning
among
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students
for entire period of
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course
. It
was quit
productivity session I attended ever, it is even helping me
currently
in all aspect of my life.
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Moreover
the thrust of triumph can
be quenched
by rewards.

On personal and
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education
basis, I sometime
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think
- how difficult it would be to differentiate
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students’
performance, if
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education
sector exclude the
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grading
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system
. No
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student
will
be identified
as brilliant, average or below average.
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Grading
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system
boost competitive spirit, zest and motivation among
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students
.
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Many time
it’s
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because
of
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grading
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system
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student
realizes he has better potential of
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learning
which give them confidence to
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move
further
towards studies. I was teaching as volunteer
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teacher
to 9th
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grade
in municipal school, as a project for my management
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course
,
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but
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student
were not aware of that fact, I
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used
to take a
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class
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test
every week although those
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test
didn’t
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had
any impact on
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students
final score. A
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student
named Suresh always topped the
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tests
and in remark I always
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used
to write”
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keep
studying,
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keep
growing” fallowing 5 stars. After 3 months when my project
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got
over, I
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got
honor of helping
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class
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teacher
of 9th
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grade
for parents
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–
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teacher
meeting, I perceived Suresh parents not much interested about his
further
studies as no member of their family had been to school or had any
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education
.
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But
when I
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showed
his father his
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grade
, and
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discussed about his
ability and consistent excellent performance, and when his
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class
-
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teacher
gave my example and
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explained
that I am
also
a
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student
, who was teaching 9th
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grade
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students
as my project and will be getting lucrative job
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soon
on completion of my
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course
. They wanted Suresh to study
further
.
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Grades
give recognition to
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student’s
ability and performance.

Our
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education
legislation
are designed
keeping its effect on
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students
;
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so
far
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grading
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system
has
been proved
immensely
beneficial for learner and it’s
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because
of
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grades
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student
cans sale themselves to competitive corporations and
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companies
. Without
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grading
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system
,
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education
will be
merely
an activity to perform.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
67Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Mistakes

IELTS essay Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 843

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
587 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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