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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. v.833

Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. v. 833
A commercial film contains various features as well as the country' s cultural values. Even though showing of cultural aspects of commercial films may dependent on the main purpose of advertising, the viewers are enabling to grasp the country' s information directly and indirectly regardless with the nature of the advertisements. Advertising contains may information. Depends on the nature of advertisements, the message of advertising can be vary and it contains massive information. Also, the information that focused on the product varies. Some might focus with the function of the products while others focus on the effects of the products. For example, the advertising for a cereal can provide a huge range of data; the ways to eat cereals, the nutrition values and the effects of the products, but the advertisements are only focusing one aspect at a time. By doing that, the viewers can understand about the product well and which can be different from a country to a country. In contrast, the nature of advertisement is dependent upon the purpose of commercial film but viewers can still see the cultural aspect of advertisement. In the case of language used, background (environment) scenes and the methods of eating related to the cultures indirectly. However, if the advertisements are related to travelling, then the viewers can get more knowledge about countries. Likewise, the nature of products provide the information about the country in a direct or indirect way which we may not aware of. In conclusion, advertising has been telling us about a country directly or indirectly. We have not aware of cultural value by looking a the products in commercials.
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commercial
film contains various features
as well
as the
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country&
#039; s
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cultural
values.
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showing of
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cultural
aspects of
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commercial
films may dependent on the main purpose of advertising, the
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viewers
are enabling to grasp the
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country&
#039; s
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information
directly
and
indirectly
regardless with the
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nature
of the advertisements.

Advertising contains may
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information
. Depends on the
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nature
of
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advertisements
, the message of advertising can be
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vary
and it contains massive
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information
.
Also
, the
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information
that focused on the
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product
varies.
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Some
might focus with the function of the
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products
while others focus on the effects of the
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products
.
For example
, the advertising for a cereal can provide a huge range of data; the ways to eat cereals, the nutrition values and the effects of the
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products
,
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but
the
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advertisements
are
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only
focusing one aspect at a time. By doing that, the
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viewers
can understand about the
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product
well and which can be
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different
from a
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country
to a country.

In contrast
, the
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nature
of
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advertisement
is dependent upon the purpose of
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commercial
film
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but
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viewers
can
still
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see
the
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cultural
aspect of
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advertisement
. In the case of language
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used
, background (environment) scenes and the methods of eating related to the cultures
indirectly
.
However
, if the
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advertisements
are related
to travelling, then the
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viewers
can
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get
more knowledge about
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countries
.
Likewise
, the
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nature
of
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products
provide the
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information
about the
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country
in a direct or indirect way which we may not aware of.

In conclusion
, advertising has been telling us about a
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country
directly
or
indirectly
. We have not aware of
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cultural
value by looking
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a the
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products
in commercials.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Advertising can tell you a lot about a country. v. 833

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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