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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Playing sports games teaches us about life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.830

Playing sports games teaches us about life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 830
Most of the people play games from their childhood. By playing games people can set their future dreams, reflect on their personal traits, and learn life-long morals. I believe that games are essential to both children and adults since they teach people about life in a variety of ways. I will elaborate on my reasons in the following paragraphs. First, people will be able to learn the significance of cooperating and collaborating with others, which is extremely essential for one’s success in life. Games are always about teamwork. A person can win a game when he is collaborating properly with their team members. Children get to experience that to win the game they have to work in synchronization. Moreover, games teach that every time a person will not get a chance to win the game. If one team wins the game, than opposite team losses. Games teach that even in life a person cannot win all the time. In addition, learning how to handle the situation of losing the success people learn first from games. Second, one of the most important factors that will help people to realize their dreams, which will also be gained from playing sports. For instance, a soldier can state his reason for joining the army as the shooting games he played as a young child, his role of games extends from mere entertainment to a major contributing factor of one' s future dreams. Further, while playing games, people are given the chance to learn about leadership. To be more specific, one can evaluate their sportsmanship while playing a soccer game, which can reflect his bright career in sports. Lastly, in today' s technological era, all parents should motivate their children to play sports. Today, children are very lazy and most of them are suffering from obesity and diabetes. If we want our future generation to be healthy then parents should motivate them to be active in sports games. My son loves football and he is a really good football player. I always motivate him to participate in all football tournaments. It helps him to get relax from its study and also, he can enjoy his time with his friends. Nowadays, universities and colleges are providing all facilities to the children to be active in the sports games. Moreover, based on the performance of the students in sports games they provide scholarships for their studies to motivate them in their sports games. Let' s put in a nutshell, games teach a lot to people, such as discipline, teamwork, and leadership. Moreover, sports games help our future generations to be active and healthy. Therefore, I strongly believe that playing sports games teaches a lot about life.
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from their childhood. By
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playing
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games
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people
can set their
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future
dreams, reflect on their personal traits, and
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learn
life-long morals. I believe that
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games
are essential to both
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children
and adults since they
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teach
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people
about
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life
in a variety of ways. I will elaborate on my reasons in the following paragraphs.

First
,
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people
will be able to
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learn
the significance of cooperating and collaborating with others, which is
extremely
essential for one’s success in
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life
.
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Games
are always about teamwork. A person can
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win
a game when he is collaborating
properly
with their team members.
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Children
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get
to experience that to
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win
the game they
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have to
work in synchronization.
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,
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games
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that every time a person will not
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a chance to
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the game. If one team wins the game,
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than
opposite team losses.
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teach
that even in
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life
a person cannot
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win
all the time.
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people
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learn
first
from games.

Second, one of the most
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important
factors that will
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help
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people
to realize their dreams, which will
also
be gained
from
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playing
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sports
.
For instance
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games
he played as a young child, his role of
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extends from mere entertainment to a major contributing factor of
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future
dreams.
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playing
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,
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the chance to
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about leadership. To be more specific, one can evaluate their sportsmanship while
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playing
a soccer game, which can reflect his bright career in sports.

Lastly
, in
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.
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,
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are
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lazy and most of them are suffering from obesity and diabetes. If we want our
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future
generation to be healthy then parents should
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motivate
them to be active in
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sports
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games
. My son
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loves
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football and
he is a
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football player. I always
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him to participate in all football tournaments. It
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helps
him to
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get
relax from its study and
also
, he can enjoy his time with his friends. Nowadays, universities and colleges are providing all facilities to the
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children
to be active in the
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sports
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games
.
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, based on the performance of the students in
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sports
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games
they provide scholarships for their studies to
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motivate
them in their
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sports
games.

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games
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teach
a lot to
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people
, such as discipline, teamwork, and leadership.
Moreover
,
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sports
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games
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help
our
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future
generations to be active and healthy.
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, I
strongly
believe that
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playing
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sports
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games
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teaches
a lot about
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life
.
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66Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Playing sports games teaches us about life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 830

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
449 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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