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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good idea to move to a new city or anew country because you will lose old friends. v.775

It is often not a good idea to move to a new city or anew country because you will lose old friends. v. 775
Since the dawn of the civilization, human being waere migtaring, either by their choice or by the force of the circumstance. They usually faced several limitation on this long way of migration; they should to abandon their assets and freinds. So hard is to make a long lasting friendship that make it hard to choose to stay or leave. When it comes to this point, some controversies arise that weather it is not a good idea to move a new country or new city because of lost of old friends. Personally, I disagree with the statement. In following lines I will present and investigate two reasons to substantiate my response. The first reason is that life is an advanture chance that only is given to a person once. living in one place for whole life, convert people' s life to a boring life and rarely can it provide an excitement for them. But living in various places is more like and adventure; people can experience many new things and never do they life get boring. Also, they can make new friends and learn a lot from them, but in camparison people who live all of their life on a place, usually get depressed and in many cases associating with friends also can not help them. For instance, I myself studied my bachelor degree in a university far from my home town. Firts, I was very upset, but as the time went on, I found new friends and experienced many worthwile things. If I did not accept to withstand the first hardship of sepration from my friends, I would not be able to exprience such a good life. The second reason is that people can have a more wide community around them. With all the new technologies in this modern world, migration does not mean isolation. People can connect their friends easily by phone and video calls, and can share their experiences. They can invite their old friends, and they can have a larger community if they let their new and old friends become friends with each other. In comparison, People who do not migrate during their life, always have a limited number of friends around them. In the same example, since I had started my study in a new city, I have had more friends compared with my home town friends. In summary, having analyzed the preceding arguments and reasons, one can soon surmise that moving to a new city does not mean losing old friends. This is because not only can people do some adventures but also they may have a larger community of friends.
Since the dawn of the civilization, human being
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waere
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migtaring
, either by their choice or by the force of the circumstance. They
usually
faced several limitation on this long way of migration; they should to abandon their assets and
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freinds
.
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long lasting
friendship that
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make
it
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hard
to choose to stay or
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leave
. When it
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to this point,
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controversies arise that weather it is not a
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good
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idea
to
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move
a
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country or
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new
city
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because
of lost of
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old
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friends
.
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, I disagree with the statement. In following lines I will present and investigate two
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reasons
to substantiate my response.

The
first
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reason
is that
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life
is an
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advanture
chance that
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is
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given
to a person once.
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living
in one place for whole
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life
, convert
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life
to a boring
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life
and rarely can it provide an excitement for them.
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living in various places is more like and adventure;
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people
can experience
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many
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new
things and never do they
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life
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get
boring.
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, they can
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make
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new
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friends
and learn a lot from them,
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but
in
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camparison
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people
who
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all of their
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life
on a place,
usually
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depressed and in
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many
cases associating with
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friends
also
can not
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help
them.
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, I myself studied my bachelor degree in a university far from my home town.
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, I was
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upset,
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but
as the time went on, I found
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new
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friends
and experienced
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many
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worthwile
things. If I did not accept to withstand the
first
hardship of
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sepration
from my
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friends
, I would not be able to
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exprience
such a
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good
life.

The second
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reason
is that
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people
can have a more wide community around them. With all the
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new
technologies in this modern world, migration does not mean isolation.
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People
can connect their
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friends
easily
by phone and video calls, and can share their experiences. They can invite their
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old
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friends
, and they can have a larger community if they
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let
their
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new
and
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old
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friends
become
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friends
with each other.
In comparison
,
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People
who do not migrate during their
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life
, always have a limited number of
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friends
around them. In the same example, since I had
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started
my study in a
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new
city, I have had more
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friends
compared with my home town friends.

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In
summary, having analyzed the preceding arguments and
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reasons
, one can
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soon
surmise that moving to a
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new
city does not mean losing
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old
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friends
. This is
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because
not
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can
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people
do
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some
adventures
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but
also
they may have a larger community of
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friends
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14Mistakes

IELTS essay It is often not a good idea to move to a new city or anew country because you will lose old friends. v. 775

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
436 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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