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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students should take out student loans to avoid working while studying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.766

Students should take out student loans to avoid working while studying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 766
I am not agree with this point that " Student should take out student loans and avoid working while studying" . In some cases I am agree with this point however all suitations are not fit in this statement. First of all talk about Why I am not supporting this point fully. In some cases some students are unable to get the loans. The loan provider is not satisfied with their economical background. Some students family are economically backward. So they are not able to pay the intrest rate on the loan. This is happened with one of my friend beacuse in her family there is no morgue to keep in bank. The bank deined their loan. In such case student have to work to fullfill there daily need and the college fee. Moreover, some students family are not ready to take the loan from bank because of higher loan interest rate. They fall in to apprehension to do that thing. In such case student have to work while studing which is best option for them. All this cases are happened with the middle and lower class family because they are not well educated so they have fear to do all procedure. However some family have good economical background, still there chlidren studing while working. They want to make their children independent. So that they can also get exprience and money too. Another view is that some students want it to become independent so they must go to woking while studing. Now, the another side of this that, some stuents can take loan and avoid working while studying. It will happened with students who have strong economical background. Their parent feels that their children do more concentration on study rather than working. Eventually, Some students have to do work while studing because of their personal problems or family economaical conditions.
I am not
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agree
with this point that
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should take out
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student
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loans
and avoid working while
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studying&quot
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.
In
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some
cases I am
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agree
with this point
however
all
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suitations
are not fit in this statement.

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First of all
talk about Why I am not supporting this point
fully
. In
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some
cases
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some
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students
are unable to
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get
the
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loans
. The
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loan
provider is not satisfied with their economical background.
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Some
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students
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family
are
economically
backward.
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So
they are not able to pay the
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intrest
rate on the
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loan
. This
is happened
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with
one of my friend
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beacuse
in her
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family
there is no morgue to
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keep
in bank. The bank
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deined
their
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loan
. In such case
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student
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have to
work to
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fullfill
there daily need and the college fee.

Moreover
,
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some
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students
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family
are not ready to take the
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loan
from bank
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because
of higher
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loan
interest rate. They fall in to apprehension to do that thing. In such case
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student
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have to
work while
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studing
which
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is best
option for them. All
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this
cases
are happened
with the middle and lower
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class
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family
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because
they are not
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well educated
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so
they have fear to do all procedure.

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However
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some
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family
have
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good
economical background,
still
there
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chlidren
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studing
while working. They want to
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make
their children independent.
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So
that they can
also
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get
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exprience
and money too. Another view is that
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some
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students
want it to become independent
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so
they
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must
go to
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woking
while
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studing
.

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Now
, the another side of this that,
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some
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stuents
can take
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loan
and avoid working while studying. It will
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happened
with
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students
who have strong economical background. Their parent feels that their children do more concentration on study
rather
than working.

Eventually
,
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Some
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students
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have to
do work while
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studing
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because
of their personal problems or
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family
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economaical
conditions.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
28Mistakes

IELTS essay Students should take out student loans to avoid working while studying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 766

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
310 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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