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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The decisions that people make quickly are always wrong. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v.712

The decisions that people make quickly are always wrong. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v. 712
Because life fully depends on what we decide every day, an ability of decision making is the most crucial one. However, even though it always occurs, no one is professional at decision making. Also, some people concerned that the sudden decision is always wrong while others strongly disagree with it. From my sight, regardless of everyday life requires from us to make sudden decisions in trivial things, it has numerous negative impacts. To begin with, the sudden decisions do not provide us with enough time to analyze all the possible solutions that could succeed. As a result, the unexpected trouble always appears when everything goes smoothly through the plan. As an illustration, when I was applied to the scholarship of summer program which is the sudden decision, I chosen the topic and wrote the essay only for thirty minutes. Obviously, I did not accept the permission to get a scholarship while the sixty percent of the applicants have a chance to receive it. At first, I was pretty confident for me because I am one of the best essay writers among my classmates but after all, I saw the topic that I chose is not related to the ones that program allowed. Moreover, because the sudden decisions are not reliable, it does not appeal to people that much. Another disadvantage of the sudden decision is, most of it directly depends on the emotion of that time and the surroundings. When people have a temporary emotion, they cannot control themselves which drives the decision to the wrong path. For instance, the fighting is the ideal example of the sudden decision that triggered by the emotion. Besides, people really take care of what impression they leave for the people who surround them. Some of them decide the way that shows them cool for others even though how much negative impacts it has. For example, most people prefer to wear thin clothes even though it is cold outside because it seems it makes them cool. As a result, the person can get flu and other diseases. All in all, the sudden decisions made every second wherever in the world, it has a great disadvantages for the people who do it. Also, the cons of making decisions quickly considerably outweigh its pros.
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Because
life
fully
depends on what we decide every day, an ability of
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decision making
is the most crucial one.
However
,
even though
it always occurs, no one is professional at
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decision making
.
Also
,
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some
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people
concerned that the
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sudden
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decision
is always
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wrong
while others
strongly
disagree with it. From my sight, regardless of everyday life requires from us to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
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sudden
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decisions
in trivial things, it has numerous
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negative
impacts.

To
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begin
with, the
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sudden
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decisions
do not provide us with
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enough
time to analyze all the possible solutions that could succeed.
As a result
, the unexpected trouble always appears when everything goes
smoothly
through the plan. As an illustration, when I
was applied
to the scholarship of summer program which is the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sudden
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decision
, I chosen the topic and wrote the essay
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
for thirty minutes.
Obviously
, I did not accept the permission to
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get
a scholarship while the sixty percent of the applicants have a chance to receive it. At
first
, I was pretty confident for me
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because
I am one of the best essay writers among my classmates
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but
after all
, I
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saw
the topic that I chose is not related to the ones that program
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allowed
.
Moreover
,
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because
the
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sudden
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decisions
are not reliable, it does not appeal to
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people
that much.

Another disadvantage of the
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sudden
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decision
is, most of it
directly
depends on the emotion of that time and the surroundings. When
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people
have a temporary emotion, they cannot control themselves which drives the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decision
to the
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wrong
path.
For instance
, the fighting is the ideal example of the
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sudden
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decision
that triggered by the emotion.
Besides
,
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people
really
take care of what impression they
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leave
for the
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people
who surround them.
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Some
of them decide the way that
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shows
them cool for others
even though
how much
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negative
impacts it has.
For example
, most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
prefer to wear thin clothes
even though
it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
outside
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it seems it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
them cool.
As a result
, the person can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
flu and other diseases.

All in all, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sudden
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decisions
made every second wherever in the world, it has a great disadvantages for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
who do it.
Also
, the cons of making
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decisions
quickly
considerably
outweigh its pros.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay The decisions that people make quickly are always wrong. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion. v. 712

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
378 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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