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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.695

Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 695
Change is a powerful thing in or lives. Nowadays, many development and progress have made our life more comfortable and easy to live, Some people would agree that the life is more difficult than before. Other would disagree. Even though the progress in current days has many negative effects, In my view, I believe that our life is more comfortable than it was when our grandparents were children for many reasons. First of all, health today has been developed and many diseases have eradicated. There are a lot of inventions and innovations are introduced in medical field. In fact, there are many discoveries that we can depend on, make our health is much better than before. For instance, when I was in pharmacy school, our professor in clinical pharmacy, asserted that plenty of medicines were discovered to help sick people and he explained how researchers improved drugs that before were very basic. We were very surprised that before many people died because a very simple infection, but wthe new equipment and new resources, the medical and pharmacy science well developed. This experience taught me that our ancestor was very hard and they were suffering because many diseases. Second, in outgoing day, the technology invades our life in work, study, and even in our daily basis. All we know now that we have a lot of accomplishment in technology that have made our life more comfortable. For example, before there is no internet, cellphones, cares and airplanes. Three weeks ago, aI read an aricle which avers that technology now enters to our life and it broadens our education, work, and our planet. Computers have a beneficial effect in our era and we would uses it in our life such as internet which we can use in communications and finding facts. Besides, Cellphone is easy way to communicate with your friends and family and we can use it any time and from any place. Now, we can make an interview or meeting just from a phone call. In contrast, our grandparents didn' t have a chance to use technology in our lives. They didn' t have that technology so their life was very difficult and they were struggling to find a shelter or food. As we can clearly see, our life has many luxury things and our ancestor life were hard to live. Third, the household' s work is much easier than before. We can see that women now have a good opportunity to finish their work quickly and without any effort. Actually, women use mixer, grinder, oven and a good ware cook in their work. However, our grandparent were not have all these machine t use in chores. For instance, our grandmother had to mix the four to make bread with her hand which is a very hard task and wast time. In contomprory days, we can save time in preparing everything. By the way of conclusion, based on the argument explored above, I firmly concur that our life is more convenient than our grandparent and we have a lot of things that support our life. I think we should introduce and develop our life since we dominate the earth so we should improve our life to our offspring and to our planet which is worthwhile to progress it.
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Change
is a powerful thing in or
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lives
. Nowadays,
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many development
and progress have made our
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life
more comfortable and easy to
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live
,
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people
would
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agree
that the
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life
is more difficult than
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before
. Other would disagree.
Even though
the progress in
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current
days has
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many
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negative
effects, In my view, I believe that our
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life
is more comfortable than it was when our
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grandparents
were children for
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many
reasons.

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First of all
, health
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today
has
been developed
and
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many
diseases have eradicated. There are
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a lot of
inventions and innovations
are introduced
in medical field. In fact, there are
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many
discoveries that we can depend on,
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make
our health is much better than
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before
.
For instance
, when I was in pharmacy school, our professor in clinical pharmacy, asserted that
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plenty
of medicines
were discovered
to
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help
sick
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people and
he
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explained
how researchers
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improved
drugs that
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before
were
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very
basic. We were
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very
surprised that
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before
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many
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people
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died
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because
a
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very
simple infection,
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but
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wthe
new equipment and new resources, the medical and pharmacy science
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well developed
. This experience taught me that our ancestor was
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very
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hard and
they were suffering
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because
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many
diseases.

Second, in outgoing day, the
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technology
invades our
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life
in
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work
, study, and even in our daily basis. All we know
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now
that we have
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a lot of
accomplishment in
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technology
that have made our
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life
more comfortable.
For example
,
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before
there is no internet, cellphones, cares and airplanes. Three weeks ago,
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aI
read an
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aricle
which avers that
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technology
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now
enters to our
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life
and it broadens our education,
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work
, and our planet. Computers have a beneficial effect in our
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era and
we would
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uses
it in our
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life
such as internet which we can
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use
in communications and finding facts.
Besides
, Cellphone is
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easy
way to communicate with your friends and
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family and
we can
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use
it any time and from any place.
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Now
, we can
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make
an interview or meeting
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just
from a phone call.
In contrast
, our
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grandparents
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didn&
#039; t have a chance to
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use
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technology
in our
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lives
. They
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didn&
#039; t have that
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technology
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so
their
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life
was
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very
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difficult and
they were struggling to find a shelter or food. As we can
clearly
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see
, our
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life
has
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many
luxury things and our ancestor
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life
were
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hard
to
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live
.

Third, the
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household&
#039; s
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work
is much easier than
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before
. We can
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see
that women
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now
have a
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good
opportunity to finish their
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work
quickly
and without any effort. Actually, women
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use
mixer, grinder, oven and a
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good
ware cook in their
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work
.
However
, our
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grandparent
were not
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have
all these machine t
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use
in chores.
For instance
, our grandmother had to mix the four to
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make
bread with her hand which is a
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very
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hard
task and wast time. In
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contomprory
days, we can save time in preparing everything.

By the way of conclusion, based on the argument explored above, I
firmly
concur that our
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life
is more convenient than our
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
grandparent and
we have
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a lot of
things that support our
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life
. I
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think
we should introduce and develop our
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life
since we dominate the earth
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so
we should
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improve
our
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life
to our offspring and to our planet which is worthwhile to progress it.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
38Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20Mistakes

IELTS essay Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 695

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
548 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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