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Moving from place to place can be stressful but can also bring new opportunities. Do you prefer to live in one place for a long time or to move somewhere new every few years? Use specific reasons to explain your opinion? v.2

Moving from place to place can be stressful but can also bring new opportunities. Do you prefer to live in one place for a long time or to move somewhere new every few years? Use specific reasons to explain your opinion? v. 2
People migrate for different reasons. But I think that moving from places frequently would create problems and difficult situations that are irreversible in nature. So I believe that staying at one place is more intelligent due to the following reasons mentioned below. To begin with, residents know their neighbours well in old neighbourhood. therefore it is easy to make friends and can trust others. In contrast if a new resident occupies a house it’s not easy to adjust with them especially if they belong to a different community. It might create trouble there and if any problems occurs no help would be offered since they are newcomers. Likewise, newly moved place might not be even friendly or welcoming in the first instance. Hence, it’s always good to stay in the old premises itself. Furthermore, strong connections are based on long lasting friendships. This will help people to start a life in the community. For instance, if an old resident starts a shop nearby people living in the community would definitely help and allow the business to proper. This is because people have faith and trust with each other and are familiar with them too. In contrast, a new commer starting a business will not grow as fast as the old residents. This is due to the fact that he is new and always marketing is needed for a enterprise to flourish, without enough support from the people nothing will happen. This again states that migrating all the time is not a good option. Additionally, without an excellent reputation in the field of work it’s not easy to get position in a company. Their spouses would also face this problem. For example, the kids will also have to face difficulty to join a new school make friends. Eventually this would create tensions in the family. But if properly preplanned and offered a job in the new place it would be heaven. Slowly it will be possible to create an address in the community. To reiterate, migrating is not a good option for people until and unless proper arrangements are made this is because not all changes will end in success. There would be difficulties and tensions in the due course of life. Hence, I prefer to stay at one place where I can live harmoniously.
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migrate for
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different
reasons.
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But
I
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think
that moving from
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places
frequently
would
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create
problems and difficult situations that are irreversible in nature.
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So
I believe that staying at one
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place
is more intelligent due to the following reasons mentioned below.

To
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begin
with,
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residents
know their
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neighbours
well in
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old
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neighbourhood
.
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therefore
it is easy to
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make
friends and can trust others. In
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contrast
if a
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new
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resident
occupies a
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house
it’s not easy to adjust with them
especially
if they belong to a
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different
community. It might
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create
trouble there and if any problems occurs no
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help
would
be offered
since they are newcomers.
Likewise
,
newly
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moved
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place
might not be even friendly or welcoming in the
first
instance.
Hence
, it’s always
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good
to stay in the
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old
premises itself.

Furthermore
, strong connections
are based
on
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long lasting
friendships. This will
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help
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people
to
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start
a life in the community.
For instance
, if an
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old
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resident
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starts
a shop nearby
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people
living in the community would definitely
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help
and
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allow
the business to proper. This is
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because
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people
have faith and trust with each other and are familiar with them too.
In contrast
, a
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new
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commer
starting a business will not grow as
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fast
as the
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old
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residents
.
This is due to the fact that
he is
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new
and always marketing
is needed
for
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a
enterprise to flourish, without
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enough
support from the
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people
nothing will happen. This again states that migrating all the time is not a
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good
option.

Additionally
, without an excellent reputation in the field of work it’s not easy to
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get
position in a
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company
. Their spouses would
also
face this problem.
For example
, the kids will
also
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have to
face difficulty to
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join
a
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new
school
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make
friends.
Eventually
this would
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create
tensions in the family.
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But
if
properly
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preplanned
and offered a job in the
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new
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place
it would be heaven.
Slowly
it will be possible to
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create
an address in the community.

To reiterate, migrating is not a
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good
option for
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people
until and unless proper arrangements
are made
this is
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because
not all
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changes
will
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end
in success. There would be difficulties and tensions in the due course of life.
Hence
, I prefer to stay at one
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place
where I can
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live
harmoniously
.
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28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Moving from place to place can be stressful but can also bring new opportunities. Do you prefer to live in one place for a long time or to move somewhere new every few years? Use specific reasons to explain your opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
384 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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