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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A person should not make an important decision alone. v.673

A person should not make an important decision alone. v. 673
Decision making have been a really controversial issue. Many prominent experts wrote various practical books on this matter. Some people believe that an individual should make an important decision based on his thoughts, beliefs, and experiences because he knows his situation better than anyone else. However, from my vantage point, a person should get dozens of advice from different people because he can use their experience, and see the problem from different angles. First and foremost, asking people about a specific problem can help a person to use others experiences. None of us have experienced all the situations and problems such as choosing a career, buying a dwelling, investing money, and so on. Therefore, we cannot rely on our knowledge and experience to make a good decision. By making a decision alone, we may judge it just from our past experiences which is really limited. Thus, we should never make an important decision alone. Some people even believe that experience is the best tool in decision making. By asking experienced people such as our parents, grandparents, teachers, or professors about an issue, they can pave the way for us and show us the consequences of a decision. For instance, last year I wanted to buy a house for myself, so I asked my parents and uncles about a good neighborhood in our city compatible to my budget. They talked to me about their past experiences in residing in different neighborhoods. As a result, I bought the best house I could afford with considering their comments, and now I am really happy about asking them. Thus, the more we get advice from qualified people, the better we can make a decision. Furthermore, by not making a decision on our own, we can evaluate an important problem from different perspectives. Every human raised in a unique situation and has its own beliefs and points of view. We can use these various notions in decision making. Asking knowledgeable people about their way of thinking about a subject can help us to become familiar with the merits and drawbacks of an important decision. As a result, we can evaluate this matter thoroughly and make the best decision in a shorter span of time. Recently conducted research from a prestigious university in my country, Iran, shows that people listening to the advice of professionals made better decisions than people who took their decisions alone. Also, many books accentuate on the importance of consulting when you want to make an important decision because we make irrational decisions. Hence, the more we acquire opinion from people on a single problem, the better we can evaluate its outcomes. All in all, making an important decision alone not only can restrict our outlook about a problem, but also may bring about very bad results. It is predicted that schools and universities will teach decision making courses in their curriculum and discourage them on making an important decision alone.
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have been a
really
controversial issue.
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Many
prominent experts wrote various practical books on this matter.
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Some
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people
believe that an individual should
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make
an
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important
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decision
based on his thoughts, beliefs, and
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experiences
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because
he knows his situation
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better
than anyone else.
However
, from my vantage point, a person should
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get
dozens of advice from
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different
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people
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because
he can
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use
their
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experience
, and
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see
the
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problem
from
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different
angles.

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and foremost, asking
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people
about a specific
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problem
can
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help
a person to
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use
others
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experiences
. None of us have experienced all the situations and
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problems
such as choosing a career, buying a dwelling, investing money, and
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so
on.
Therefore
, we cannot rely on our knowledge and
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experience
to
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make
a
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good
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decision
. By making a
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decision
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alone
, we may judge it
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just
from our past
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experiences
which is
really
limited.
Thus
, we should never
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make
an
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important
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decision
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alone
.
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Some
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people
even believe that
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experience
is the best tool in
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decision making
. By asking experienced
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people
such as our parents, grandparents, teachers, or professors about an issue, they can pave the way for us and
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show
us the consequences of a
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decision
.
For instance
, last year I wanted to
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buy
a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
for myself,
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so
I asked my parents and uncles about a
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good
neighborhood in our city compatible to my budget. They talked to me about their past
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experiences
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in residing in
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different
neighborhoods.
As a result
, I
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bought
the best
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house
I could afford with considering their comments, and
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now
I am
really
happy about asking them.
Thus
, the more we
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get
advice from qualified
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people
, the
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better
we can
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make
a decision.

Furthermore
, by not making a
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decision
on our
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own
, we can evaluate an
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important
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problem
from
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different
perspectives. Every human raised in a unique situation and has its
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own
beliefs and points of view. We can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
these various notions in
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decision making
. Asking knowledgeable
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people
about their way of thinking about a subject can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us to become familiar with the merits and drawbacks of an
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important
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decision
.
As a result
, we can evaluate this matter
thoroughly
and
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make
the best
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decision
in a shorter span of time. Recently conducted research from a prestigious university in my country, Iran,
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shows
that
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people
listening to the advice of professionals made
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better
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decisions
than
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people
who took their
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decisions
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alone
.
Also
,
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many
books accentuate on the importance of consulting when you want to
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make
an
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important
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decision
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because
we
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make
irrational
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decisions
.
Hence
, the more we acquire opinion from
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people
on a single
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problem
, the
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better
we can evaluate its outcomes.

All in all, making an
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important
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decision
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alone
not
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only
can restrict our outlook about a
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problem
,
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but
also
may bring about
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very
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bad
results. It
is predicted
that schools and universities will teach
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decision making
courses in their curriculum and discourage them on making an
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important
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decision
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alone
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
68Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay A person should not make an important decision alone. v. 673

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
489 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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