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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is the responsibility of the government to provide health care to everyone living in that country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.668

It is the responsibility of the government to provide health care to everyone living in that country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 668
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on whether governments are responsible for the health care services for their citizens or not. Personally, I think the duty of all governments around the world is to provide perfect services for all citizens and improve the living outcomes. Thus, they have to give suitable health care for all people in the country. To begin with, most authorities used to take taxes from citizens. They deduct more than 30% of the salary that employees receive. Therefore, these people need to take some services in return. For example, in the United States, the government deduct almost thirty percent of citizen’s monthly salary in order to have some budget to offer the best services for people. Thus, this enormous amount of money gives the people the right to ask the government for a perfect health care services in return. Adding to the previous point, citizens are putting most of their effort to develop their countries. So, their basic right is to get some health care as a reward from the government. They do not have to struggle to look for clinical services whenever they have health issues. On top of that, the government has to provide these clinical services to its citizens in order to increase their loyalty to the country. For instance, the government in Saudi Arabia provides free health services for all citizens. Hence, most Saudi people feel satisfied with all free health benefits from the government. They do not want to leave the country because of this unique advantage. Thus, they become more loyal to the country. However, when people have difficulties getting some clinical benefits because the government does not offer them, people tend to become upset and sometimes create problems to the government such as protesting on the street and burning some public amenities. So, they become less loyal to the government. In conclusion, I strongly believe that governments are responsible to provide health care services to all people.
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governments
are responsible for the
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health
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care
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services
for their
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citizens
or not.
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, I
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think
the duty of all
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governments
around the world is to
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provide
perfect
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services
for all
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citizens
and
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improve
the living outcomes.
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, they
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have to
give suitable
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health
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care
for all
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people
in the country.

To
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begin
with, most authorities
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used
to take taxes from
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citizens
. They deduct more than 30% of the salary that employees receive.
Therefore
, these
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people
need to take
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some
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services
in return.
For example
, in the United States, the
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government
deduct almost thirty percent of
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citizen’s
monthly salary in order to have
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some
budget to offer the best
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services
for
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people
.
Thus
, this enormous amount of money gives the
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people
the right to ask the
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government
for a perfect
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health
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care
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services
in return.

Adding to the previous point,
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citizens
are putting most of their effort to develop their
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countries
.
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, their basic right is to
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get
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some
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health
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care
as a reward from the
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government
. They do not
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have to
struggle to look for clinical
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services
whenever they have
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health
issues.

On top of that
, the
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government
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has to
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provide
these clinical
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services
to its
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citizens
in order to increase their loyalty to the
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country
.
For instance
, the
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government
in Saudi Arabia
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provides
free
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health
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services
for all
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citizens
.
Hence
, most Saudi
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people
feel satisfied with all free
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health
benefits from the
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government
. They do not want to
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leave
the
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country
because of this
unique advantage.
Thus
, they become more loyal to the
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country
.
However
, when
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people
have difficulties getting
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some
clinical benefits
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because
the
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government
does not offer them,
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people
tend to become upset and
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sometimes
create problems to the
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government
such as protesting on the street and burning
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some
public amenities.
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So
, they become less loyal to the
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government
.

In conclusion
, I
strongly
believe that
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governments
are responsible to
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provide
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health
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care
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services
to all
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people
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay It is the responsibility of the government to provide health care to everyone living in that country. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 668

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
331 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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