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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? childhood is the happiest time of a person's life. v.611

childhood is the happiest time of a person's life. v. 611
Have you ever thought about your childhood memories deeply? I believe that childhood is the happiest time of a person' s life. First and for most, childhood is time for education and discovering the world. secondly, we have all the attention and kindness of parents and families. Lastly, friendships in childhood are really honest and precious. I wholheartedly believe that childhood is a very great time because in this period a human being strats to discover the amazing world and every thing seems so fabolous to a child. taken as an example I never forgot my first flight when I was five. In addition a human being starts to education in childhood and learning is so much fun when you are a child. The expriences of teachers are proof to my statement. they say primary school students are so keen for learning but other students like highs chooleers are mostly reluctant for learning and discovering. Having discuss the issue from that point of view, I would rather discuss it from another perspective. No one can deny that childhood is memorible and a very great time because we were center of attention. Dr pour sharifi, my professor in addition a highly educated person states that one of the important reasons of depression in teen ages is losing the attention that they used to have in their childhood. If you ask me, there is no one in the world who is not missing the honesty in childhood. frienships in childhood and primary school are one of the most beautiful relationships. In this friendships no one is trying to be somene else in order to impress his or her friend. According to a recent opinion poll wich was held in Afarinesh high school, about sixty percent of participants stated that they want to go back to their childhood because there were no liaying and cheating in childhood. In conclusion I think I completely agree with the statement. childhood is the happiest time in lifespan because it is the time for early education and discovering the world plus a child is center of attention furthermore frienships in this time are based on truth and honesty.
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thought
about your childhood memories
deeply
? I believe that childhood is the happiest
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time
of a
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person&
#039; s life.
First
and for most, childhood is
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time
for education and discovering the
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world
.
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secondly
, we have all the
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attention
and kindness of parents and families.
Lastly
, friendships in childhood are
really
honest and precious.

I
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wholheartedly
believe that childhood is a
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very
great
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time
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because
in this period a human being
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strats
to discover the amazing
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world
and every thing seems
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so
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fabolous
to a child.
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taken
as an example I never forgot my
first
flight when I was five. In
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addition
a human being
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starts
to education in childhood and learning is
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so
much fun when you are a child. The
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expriences
of teachers are proof to my statement.
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they
say primary school students are
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so
keen for learning
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but
other students like highs
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chooleers
are
mostly
reluctant for learning and discovering.

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rather
discuss it from another perspective. No one can deny that childhood is
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memorible
and a
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very
great
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time
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because
we were center of
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attention
. Dr pour
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sharifi
, my professor
in addition
a
highly
educated person states that one of the
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important
reasons of depression in teen ages is losing the
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attention
that they
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used
to have in their childhood.

If you ask me, there is no one in the
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world
who is not missing the honesty in childhood.
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frienships
in childhood and primary school are one of the most
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beautiful
relationships. In
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this
friendships no one is trying to be
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somene
else in order to impress
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his or her
friend. According to a recent opinion poll
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wich
was held
in
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Afarinesh
high school, about sixty percent of participants stated that they want to go back to their childhood
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because
there were no
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liaying
and cheating in childhood.

In
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conclusion I
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think
I completely
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agree
with the statement.
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childhood
is the happiest
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time
in lifespan
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because
it is the
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time
for early education and discovering the
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world
plus a child is center of
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attention
furthermore
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frienships
in this
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time
are based
on truth and honesty.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
21Mistakes

IELTS essay childhood is the happiest time of a person's life. v. 611

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
361 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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