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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know what is happening around the world, even if it does not affect your personal lives. v.580

It is important to know what is happening around the world, even if it does not affect your personal lives. v. 580
Knowing about the world, as we all know, is one of the crucial factors which every country spend many times to evaluate it as a political assessment. Although it may seem exaggerated, at first sight, many people may find this contention sensible. In this regard, many people support this opinion that it is important to know about the world, even if it does not affect your personal life. I believe that having information about other countries is important both in political and social aspects. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint. The first reason which makes me hold this belief is the political aspect. When people in a country be satisfied with their government, the possibility of the riot will decline and people will live in peace, and of course, peace all around the world is far better than evolution. Undoubtedly, un-calm relationships in the boundaries of a country likely to transform to the neighbor countries, unfortunately. Take ISS as an example; when it started in a distant country in the Middle East, there was no idea how much it could be transformed beyond the boundaries and destroy other countries. Another equally noteworthy reason to bear in mind is the social aspect. Although inbound situations of different countries may seem non-effective in other countries in a short time, unfavorable circumstances in a country or problematic relationships between countries can negatively indirectly affect the other nation. Without a doubt, people maybe indispensably have to endure circumstances that do not play any role in it. Take a general sample as an example, take into account a country which imports a necessary good from a country which is in an adverse situation. What would have happened if it had not allowed importing that specific good? The country should find another destination to buy that good, indeed. However, as long as they try to find another country, possibly the price of that specific good rises and people should bear the situation which has no specific role in it. Therefore, knowing about other countries positively useful. To summarize, contemplating all remarks, we safely can conclude that knowing about nations have both political and social aspects considered by people.
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times to evaluate it as a political assessment. Although it may seem exaggerated, at
first
sight,
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many
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people
may find this contention sensible. In this regard,
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many
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people
support this opinion that it is
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important
to know about the world, even if it does not affect your personal life. I believe that having information about
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other
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countries
is
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important
both in political and social
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aspects
. I will delve into two conspicuous reasons to elaborate on my standpoint.

The
first
reason which
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makes
me hold this belief is the political
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. When
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people
in a
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country
be satisfied
with their
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government
, the possibility of the riot will decline and
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will
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live
in peace, and
of course
, peace all around the world is far better than evolution.
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relationships in the boundaries of a
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likely to transform to the neighbor
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, unfortunately. Take ISS as an example; when it
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started
in a distant
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in the Middle East, there was no
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idea
how much it could
be transformed
beyond the boundaries and
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destroy
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other
countries.

Another
equally
noteworthy reason to bear in mind is the social
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aspect
. Although inbound situations of
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different
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countries
may seem non-effective in
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other
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countries
in a short time, unfavorable circumstances in a
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country
or problematic relationships between
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countries
can
negatively
indirectly
affect the
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nation. Without a doubt,
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maybe
indispensably
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endure circumstances that do not play any role in it. Take a general sample as an example, take into account a
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country
which imports a necessary
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good
from a
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country
which is in an adverse situation. What would have happened if it had not
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allowed
importing that specific
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good
? The
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country
should find another destination to
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buy
that
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good
,
indeed
.
However
, as long as they try to find another
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country
,
possibly
the price of that specific
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good
rises and
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people
should bear the situation which has no specific role in it.
Therefore
, knowing about
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other
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countries
positively
useful.

To summarize
, contemplating all remarks, we
safely
can conclude that knowing about nations have both political and social
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aspects
considered by
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people
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
Learn a language, and you’ll avoid a war.
Arab Proverb

IELTS essay It is important to know what is happening around the world, even if it does not affect your personal lives. v. 580

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
368 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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