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one can learn about a person by books and movies that person likes. Do you agree or disagree on this statement? v.2

one can learn about a person by books and movies that person likes. v. 2
More often than not, we fall a circumstance of not having a proper friend or wrong association. As a result, we cannot stop tolerating the miseries of our life which above all disperses a bit of repentance. As a whole, we to judge a person is a must to sustain a congenial relationship among ourselves. In this case, identifying a person with the help of examining the books and movies that he likes is not the correct approach so long as I study. For sure, I will try with my might and main to hold up the inner exactness of my statement with specific reasons. To embark on, a particular person has different fashion of choices, likes and dislikes which invariably are differential and cannot be related with the help of mathematics or scientific logic as we know human mind is the touchiness embodiment of philosophy. What I want to say by this is that to find out the main theme of a person’s inner quality is not only cumbersome but also quite improbable. From time immemorial till now, so many philosophers relentlessly tried with their best to get the gist psychology as tantamount as overall people and confined to this mammoth scenario within an equation. For example, Aristotle, Plato they enormously intervened a way so that they easily interpret the thinking which a man ponders over or what he wants to perform. But it is easy task to make out the internees of a social being. Rather they discovered that if it is tried, it will be the greatest foolishness of the world endeavors. In addition, a man likes to read a book, watches movies. This information doe not mean necessarily that he is only accustomed to a particular book. Which is why I think only by knowing a person’s two or three habits is not an ideal way to discover himself. He may love to read a romantic book but sometimes he read thriller book. So, if we judge himself according to thriller book, proper judgement will not come. For instance, my bosom friend read different types of comic book, I know that from my first year. Undoubtably I can refer what types of comic he already finished, but when he expressed me that he just passed his time by reading book, I was discombobulated. So, to judge a person as a book is not a proper idea. Furthermore, some movie he likes to discover a person holds up a misreporting concept. A person loves to watch thriller movie, it does not carry its whole characteristics. On the other hand if we consider that he is a movie-goer, it will be wrong decision as he just fill up his leisure via watching thriller movie. May be in most of time, he watches action movie. So to investigate a person via only movie or book is not an approachable one which I think. For example, my brother watch action movie and he loves his country. But after a period, I saw that he actually jingoism, so how we interpret it. To wrap it up, though many person oppose my opinion, I wholeheartedly opine that by dint of a book or movie which a person likes is not a constructing system to figure out a person. Rather its consequences will be clear, if we keep close association with him.
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stop
tolerating the miseries of our life which
above all
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person
is a
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must to
sustain a congenial relationship among ourselves.
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person
with the
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help
of examining the
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and
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that he
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is not the correct approach
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long as I study. For sure, I will try with my might and main to hold up the inner exactness of my statement with specific reasons.

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person
has
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fashion of choices,
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likes
and dislikes which
invariably
are differential and cannot
be related
with the
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help
of mathematics or scientific logic as we know human mind is the touchiness embodiment of philosophy. What I want to say by this is that to find out the main theme of a
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person’s
inner quality is not
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cumbersome
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also
quite improbable. From time immemorial till
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,
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philosophers
relentlessly
tried with their best to
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get
the gist psychology as tantamount as
overall
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people
and confined to this mammoth scenario within an equation.
For example
, Aristotle, Plato they
enormously
intervened a way
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so
that they
easily
interpret the thinking which a
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man
ponders over or what he wants to perform.
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But
it is easy task to
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make
out the internees of a social being.
Rather
they discovered that if it
is tried
, it will be the greatest foolishness of the world endeavors.

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, a
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man
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likes
to
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a
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book
,
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watches
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movies
. This information doe not mean
necessarily
that he is
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only
accustomed to a particular
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book
. Which is why I
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think
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only
by knowing a
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person’s
two or three habits is not an ideal way to discover himself. He may
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love
to
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a romantic
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he
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thriller
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book
.
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So
, if we judge himself according to
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thriller
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book
, proper judgement will not
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come
.
For instance
, my bosom friend
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read
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different
types of comic
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book
, I know that from my
first
year.
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Undoubtably
I can refer what types of comic he already finished,
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but
when he expressed me that he
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passed his time by reading
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book
, I
was discombobulated
.
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So
, to judge a
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person
as a
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is not a proper
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.

Furthermore
,
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he
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likes
to discover a
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person
holds up a misreporting concept. A
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person
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loves
to
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watch
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thriller
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movie
, it does not carry its whole characteristics.
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decision as he
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fill
up his leisure via watching
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movie
. May
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be
in
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, he
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watches
action
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movie
.
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to investigate a
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via
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movie
or
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book
is not an approachable one which I
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.
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, my brother
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action
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movie and
he
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loves
his country.
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after a period, I
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saw
that he actually jingoism,
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how we interpret it.

To wrap it up, though
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many
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person
oppose my opinion, I
wholeheartedly
opine that by dint of a
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book
or
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movie
which a
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person
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likes
is not a constructing system to figure out a
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person
.
Rather
its consequences will be
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clear
, if we
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keep
close association with him.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
53Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay one can learn about a person by books and movies that person likes. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
559 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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