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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertisingcan tell you a lot about a country. Use specific reasons and examplesto support your answer. v.550

Advertisingcan tell you a lot about a country. Use specific reasons and examplesto support your answer. v. 550
Nowadays advertising helps companies to sell their products. Some countries pay advertising to promote tourists to visit their places. However, advertising does not tell you a lot about a country. Thus, the information provided by the media is based in unreal evidence because they are written by foreign writers, so people should go and have their own experience. Any discussion about the truth about a country must include real evidence. Most of the advertising is made to persuade people. Thus, some of them are based on false information to encourage tourists to go. For instance, if a person wants to travel to Cuba, he will feel discouraged after watching the awful advertising about the situation there. Moreover, Cuba has vast beaches more beautiful than any in the USA, but the advertising does not want to show you that side. Advertising will convince people do not go there based on false or partial evidence. In addition, advertising is written or showed by foreign people, who do not know the inside of the country. A person out of the country does not understand the meaning of the country' s culture, such as, the food, dances, and folk. However, local people can exactly tell you what tourists want to know. Furthermore, TV shows or newspapers do not give you as much detail as a citizen who lives there can. Finally, the only accurate way to know about a country is having own experience. Visiting the place, knowing their culture and interacting with locals are some ways to grasp the inside of a country. For example, if a person goes to Cuba, he could give their own view because of his experience; perhaps, he would agree with what he read or disagree, but this is possible just possible by going there and have a real encounter. To conclude, adverting does not tell people a lot of information about a country. It provides the information they want you to see and does not the truth about it. My recommendation is that if you want to see how a country looks like, you have to go and see with your own eyes the truth.
Nowadays advertising
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helps
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companies
to sell their products.
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Some
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countries
pay advertising to promote tourists to visit their places.
However
, advertising
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does
not
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tell
you a lot about a
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country
.
Thus
, the
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information
provided by the media
is based
in unreal evidence
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because
they
are written
by foreign writers,
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so
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people
should go and have their
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own
experience.

Any discussion about the truth about a
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country
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must
include real evidence. Most of the advertising
is made
to persuade
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people
.
Thus
,
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some
of them
are based
on false
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information
to encourage tourists to go.
For instance
, if a person
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wants
to travel to Cuba, he will feel discouraged after watching the awful advertising about the situation there.
Moreover
, Cuba has vast beaches more
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beautiful
than any in the USA,
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but
the advertising
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does
not
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want
to
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show
you that side. Advertising will convince
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people
do not go there based on false or partial evidence.

In addition
, advertising
is written
or
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showed
by foreign
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people
, who do not know the inside of the
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country
. A person out of the
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country
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does
not understand the meaning of the
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country&
#039; s culture, such as, the food, dances, and folk.
However
, local
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people
can exactly
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tell
you what tourists
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want
to know.
Furthermore
, TV
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shows
or newspapers do not give you as much detail as a citizen who
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lives
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there
can.

Finally
, the
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only
accurate way to know about a
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country
is having
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own
experience. Visiting the place, knowing their culture and interacting with locals are
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some
ways to grasp the inside of a
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country
.
For example
, if a person goes to Cuba, he could give their
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own
view
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because
of his experience; perhaps, he would
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agree
with what he read or disagree,
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but
this is possible
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just
possible by going there and have a real encounter.

To conclude
, adverting
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does
not
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tell
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people
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a lot of
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information
about a
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country
. It provides the
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information
they
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want
you to
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see
and
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does
not the truth about it. My recommendation is that if you
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want
to
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see
how a
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country
looks like, you
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have to
go and
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see
with your
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own
eyes the truth.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Advertisingcan tell you a lot about a country. Use specific reasons and examplesto support your answer. v. 550

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
358 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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