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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Youth is wasted on the young. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.54

Youth is wasted on the young. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 54
Packaging plays an essential role in preventing any good from getting damaged during sell or transporting it from one place to another. But, there has been noticed many problems due to packaging, therefore someone opines that manufacturers and supermarkets should come forward to minimize excessive packaging while others believe it should be along with customers. Now, I am going to discuss both views and give my opinion. To begin with, It is clear that the supermarkets and manufacturers must shoulder the responsibility for reducing packaging because they lure customers to buy more and more goods by promoting more use of packaging, which in turn creates later several complications. In other words, the quality of goods is the major factor which customers take into consideration, and this consideration of the quality of the product is ensured by supermarkets thereby they can conveniently reduce packaging.  In addition, supermarkets and manufacturers are mostly making branded goods, so they should not have any problem with the issue of decline in sell thus they can reduce packaging to a great extent. Furthermore, supermarkets can give various offers on goods so that the customer should not care about packaging. On the other hand,  customers can also help in reducing packaging because supermarkets mostly focus on huge packaging to fulfil all the requirements of customers. Correspondingly, customers can help with declining packaging owing to many possible reasons. Firstly, if a customer prefers the product with minimal packaging then it would help manufacturers and supermarkets to pay heed on using simple packaging. Secondly, customers must primarily focus on the quality and cost of the product. As a result, supermarkets will emphasize moreover quality with affordable prices and not on the packaging. In conclusion, there should be a collaborative approach for declining packaging by both supermarkets and customers, as it may result in better outcomes.
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Packaging
plays an essential role in preventing any
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good
from getting damaged during sell or transporting it from one place to another.
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But
, there has
been noticed
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many
problems due to
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packaging
,
therefore
someone opines that manufacturers and supermarkets should
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come
forward to minimize excessive
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packaging
while others believe it should be along with
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customers
.
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Now
, I am going to discuss both views and give my opinion.

To
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begin
with, It is
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clear
that the supermarkets and manufacturers 
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must
shoulder the responsibility for reducing
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packaging
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because
they lure
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customers
to
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buy
more and more
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goods
 by promoting more
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use
of
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packaging
, which in turn creates later several complications.
In other words
, the
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quality
of
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goods
is the major factor which
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customers
take into consideration, and this consideration of the
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quality
of the product
is ensured
by supermarkets thereby they can
conveniently
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reduce
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packaging
.  
In addition
, supermarkets and manufacturers are
mostly
making branded
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goods
,
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so
they should not have any problem with the issue of decline in sell
thus
they can
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reduce
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packaging
to a great extent.
Furthermore
, supermarkets can give various offers on
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goods
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so
that the
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customer
should not care about packaging.

On the other hand
,
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 customers
can
also
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help
in reducing
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packaging
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because
supermarkets
mostly
focus on huge
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packaging
to fulfil all the requirements of
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customers
.
Correspondingly
,
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customers
can
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help
with declining
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packaging
owing to
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many
possible reasons.
Firstly
, if a customer prefers the product with minimal
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packaging
then it would
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help
manufacturers and supermarkets to pay heed on using simple
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packaging
.
Secondly
,
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customers
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must
primarily
focus on the
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quality
and cost of the product.
As a result
, supermarkets will emphasize
moreover
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quality
with affordable prices and not on the packaging.

In conclusion
, there should be a collaborative approach for declining
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packaging
by both supermarkets and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customers
, as it may result in better outcomes.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Youth is wasted on the young. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 54

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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