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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time. Use specific reasons to support your answer. v.506

A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time. Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 506
By and large, the contemporary age is no strange to the notion of friendships and its importance in such a competitive world. Without having some stunning friends, it depends on chance or exceptional talents of people that they can make some obvious improvements. In this regard, some people argue that keeping to live in one place and maintaining friendships with the same people is of greater importance, as compared with the case when we relocate, while others take issue with this viewpoint. Notwithstanding differences, in my view, moving to newer place during the time can permit us to face some great occasions. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs. To begin with, by moving to a new city or country, we can be provided with more opportunities to make further money in comparison with the time when we would live in the former place. Money is the basic requirement for life without which one cannot imagine a peaceful and healthy lifestyle. In the modern time, where the growth of civilization is going too fast and following the western culture, we need even more money to handle our day to day life. Going to a new place, we can confront with much better chances to make some remarkable money, including finding a job in a wealthy company, sharing money with someone else, and investing in a great construction project. Secondly, based on my observations, with going to a new place, we can learn to communicate better with others, thus increasing the possibility of finding new golden opportunities in the not-so-distant future. If one is going to improve his or her bottom lines, such as impressing others by our objectives, training to improve our communication skills is the best place to start. In order to ensure that you are able to convey your message effectively, you need to communicate properly with the other person. If you are not capable of communicating your message clear as well as loud to the other individual, he/ she will not be able to perceive the true meaning as well as a motive behind your message. Moving to a new place can allow us to exploit new chances to communicate better with other people, such as our instructors, managers, and friends. All in all, as mentioned above, moving to a newer place can allow us to make more money and to communicate better with others. In spite of that, both moving to a new place and remaining in a place for a long time have some pros and cons. To choose one over another would be a personal preference based on the one’s needs, ambitions, and desires.
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stunning friends, it depends on chance or exceptional talents of
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people
that they can
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make
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some
obvious improvements. In this regard,
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some
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people
argue that keeping to
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in one
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place
and maintaining friendships with the same
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people
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is
of greater importance, as compared with the case when we relocate, while others take issue with this viewpoint. Notwithstanding differences, in my view,
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moving
to newer
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place
during the
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time
can permit us to face
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great occasions. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, by
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to a
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new
city or country, we can
be provided
with more opportunities to
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make
further
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money
in comparison
with the
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time
when we would
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live
in the former
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place
.
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Money
is the basic requirement for life without which one cannot imagine a peaceful and healthy lifestyle. In the modern
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time
, where the growth of civilization is going too
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fast
and following the western culture, we need even more
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money
to handle our
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day to day
life. Going to a
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new
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place
, we can confront with much
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better
chances to
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make
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some
remarkable
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money
, including finding a job in a wealthy
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company
, sharing
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money
with someone else, and investing in a great construction project.

Secondly
, based on my observations, with going to a
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new
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place
, we can learn to
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communicate
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better
with others,
thus
increasing the possibility of finding
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new
golden opportunities in the not-
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-distant future. If one is going to
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improve
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his or her
bottom lines, such as impressing others by our objectives, training to
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improve
our communication
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skills
is the best
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place
to
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. In order to ensure that you are able to convey your message
effectively
, you need to
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communicate
properly
with the
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other
person. If you are not capable of communicating your message
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clear
as well
as loud to the
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other
individual, he/ she will not be able to perceive the true meaning
as well
as a motive behind your message.
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to a
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new
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place
can
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us to exploit
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chances to
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communicate
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better
with
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other
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people
, such as our instructors, managers, and friends.

All in all, as mentioned above,
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to a newer
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place
can
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allow
us to
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make
more
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money
and to
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communicate
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better
with others.
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that, both
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to a
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new
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and remaining in a
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place
for a long
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have
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pros and cons. To choose one over another would be a personal preference based on the one’s needs, ambitions, and desires.
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51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time. Use specific reasons to support your answer. v. 506

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
449 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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