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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The best things in life do not cost money. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v.47

The best things in life do not cost money. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 47
It is often thought that teachers have a greater influence in both intellectual and social aspects of children's development as soon as they start school. I completely agree with this view because teachers not only teach them how to sharpen their intellect but also how to build better relationships with one another. The first reason why teachers have a bigger influence intellectually on pupils is that, they spend a good number of hours together to teach them how to reason mathematically. Their tutors usually engage them in tasks and activities which help them to stimulate their mental process and develop their idea generation abilities, this then eventually sharpens their intellect. Eventhough, some others may think that the time spent on school is limited and may not help them to develop intellectually: this is often not the case because they mostly use this time meaningfully to solve various class works. For example, it has been proved by various scholars in studies done across the world that children who attend schools are more intelligent than those who do not. Another reason why I agree that teachers play more roles is that, schools usually have a break period where children are allowed to play freely with each other. This manner of interaction helps them to develop better in the social aspect. Moreso, when they do this under the supervision of their teachers, they develop better team spirit which helps them in future. However, some could argue that, this is better done by their parents at home, but the skills that the teachers have in doing this is a bigger advantage. For instance, an online journal I read concluded that teachers are more effective in building social relationships among pupils than their parents. In summary, school children benefit more from their teachers, who teach them how to develop mentally and socially, when they spend time together in school. I, therefore, agree that they are the most influential in these two regards.
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teach them how to sharpen their intellect
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also
how to build
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better
relationships with one another.

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first
reason why
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teachers
have a bigger influence
intellectually
on pupils is that, they spend a
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good
number of hours together to teach them how to reason
mathematically
. Their tutors
usually
engage them in tasks and activities which
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help
them to stimulate their mental process and
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develop
their
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idea
generation abilities, this then
eventually
sharpens their intellect.
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others may
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is limited
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help
them to
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develop
intellectually
: this is
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not the case
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to solve various
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works.
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, it has
been proved
by various scholars in studies done across the world that children who attend
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schools
are more intelligent than those who do not.

Another reason why I
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that
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play more roles is that,
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usually
have a break period where children are
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allowed
to play
freely
with each other. This manner of interaction
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helps
them to
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develop
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better
in the social aspect.
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, when they do this under the supervision of their
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teachers
, they
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develop
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better
team spirit which
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helps
them
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,
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could argue that, this is
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better
done by their parents at home,
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but
the
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skills
that the
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teachers
have in doing this is a bigger advantage.
For instance
, an online journal I read concluded that
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teachers
are more effective in building social relationships among pupils than their parents.

In summary,
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school
children benefit more from their
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teachers
, who teach them how to
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develop
mentally and
socially
, when they spend time together in
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school
. I,
therefore
,
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agree
that they are the most influential in these two regards.
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IELTS essay The best things in life do not cost money. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion. v. 47

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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