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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. v.389

Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. v. 389
Some people are of the notion that men and women are not equal and for that matter, they shouldn't be offered the same job opportunities. Others, however, oppose such view. In my opinion, women and men are not on the same wavelength and as such they shouldn't be granted the same work opportunities like men for various reasons which this essay will throw more light on. To begin, women are exceptionally good at so many things and seems to fill in very well wherever they find themselves and as a result of that they tend to deliver effectively at their various professions. But to give them the same professional, chances like their Male counterparts in the same field will be catastrophic to their well being. Take mine, for instance, women cannot function in this field because it requires an enormous physical strength and power. Women who find themselves in this area of work acquire serious health problems in life. Some develop issues with infertility due to the vibration of the equipment and machines they use on the site. Machines like drilling, excavators and bulldozers produces great amount of vibration. In addition to the aforementioned reason above, most women leave gaps that usually needed to be filled temporarily at various work places due to maternity leave. This puts a magnificent amount of pressure on organisations and companies. For example, a female surgeon who is on maternity leave will eventually leave a huge hole in her post and thus puts pressure on the hospital to seek a replacement for the short term. Many women more often than not experience familiar health issues associated with women and because of this they sometimes absent themselves from work and this affects job performance and productivity. To conclude, yes, we live in an equality era where the emphasis on both sexes are without partiality, but I strongly believe that certain professions are not suitable for women and such should be left alone for their male counterparts.
Some
people
are of the notion that
men
and
women
are not equal and for that matter, they shouldn't
be offered
the same job opportunities. Others,
however
, oppose such view. In my opinion,
women
and
men
are not on the same wavelength and as such they shouldn't
be granted
the same
work
opportunities like
men
for various reasons which this essay will throw more light on.

To
begin
,
women
are
exceptionally
good
at
so
many
things and seems to fill in
very
well wherever they find themselves and
as a result
of that they tend to deliver
effectively
at their various professions.
But
to give them the same professional, chances like their Male counterparts in the same field will be catastrophic to their
well being
. Take mine,
for instance
,
women
cannot function in this field
because
it requires an enormous physical strength and power.
Women
who find themselves in this area of
work
acquire serious health problems in life.
Some
develop issues with infertility due to the vibration of the equipment and machines they
use
on the site. Machines like drilling, excavators and bulldozers produces great amount of vibration.

In addition
to the aforementioned reason above, most
women
leave
gaps that
usually
needed to
be filled
temporarily
at various
work
places due to maternity
leave
. This puts a magnificent amount of pressure on
organisations
and
companies
.
For example
, a female surgeon who is on maternity
leave
will
eventually
leave
a huge hole in her post and
thus
puts pressure on the hospital to seek a replacement for the short term.
Many
women
more
often
than not experience familiar health issues associated with
women
and
because of this
they
sometimes
absent themselves from
work
and this affects job performance and productivity.

To conclude
, yes, we
live
in an equality era where the emphasis on both sexes are without partiality,
but
I
strongly
believe that certain professions are not suitable for
women
and such should be
left
alone for their male counterparts.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children. v. 389

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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